Left (Tie)

山のはに有明の月の残らずは霞にあくる空をみましや

yama no ha ni ariake no tsuki no nokorazu wa kasumi ni akuru sora o mimashi ya

Upon the mountains’ edge Had the moon at dawn Not lingered, then On the brightening, hazy Sky would I have turned my gaze?

Shō
11

Right

朝戸あけてながめなれたる明ぼのの霞ばかりに春を知るかな

asa to akete nagamenaretaru akebono no kasumi baraki ni haru o shiru kana

With morn, opening my door, and Accustomed to gazing At the dawn The haze is all that Tells me ‘tis spring![1]

Nagatsuna, Ranked without Office
12

The Left’s poem has ‘would I wish to see the skies brightening with haze’, which does not seem bad, but the initial line drop ‘dawn’ and the latter part ‘brightening with haze’ which is a bit dubious; the Right’s poem really has nothing special about it. The poems are comparable and tie.

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[1] An allusive variation on GSS V: 249.