Left (Win).
あらましに心は盡きぬ今夜とて待たばと思ふ夕暮の空
| aramashi ni kokoro wa tsukinu koyoi tote mataba to omou yūgure no sora |
Wondering if it will it be Has been the sole focus of my thoughts; Tonight, he said – ‘If only you could wait,’ so thinks The evening sky… |
Lord Ari’ie.
821
Right.
心さへかきくらすかなつくづくと思ひ入り日の空を眺めて
| kokoro sae kakikurasu kana tsukuzuku to omoi irihi no sora o nagamete |
My very heart Is sunk in darkness; On and on, Go my thoughts with the setting sun, Gazing at the sky… |
Lord Tsune’ie.
822
The Right state: we find no faults. The Left state: saying ‘on and on’ (tsukuzuku) seems somewhat weak.
In judgement: the final line of the Left’s poem sounds elegant. Again, I make the Left the winner.