Summer II: 14

Left.

これやこの人めも知らぬ山賤にさしのみ向かふ夕顔の花

kore ya kono
hitome mo shiranu
yamagatsu ni
sashi nomi mukau
yūgao no hana
Here
Hidden from all eyes,
To the mountain man
Alone, she turns
This moonflower bloom

Lord Kanemune.

267

Right (Win).

賤の男が片岡しめて住む宿をもてなす物は夕顔の花

shizu no o ga
kataoka shimete
sumu yado o
motenasu mono wa
yūgao no hana
The peasant
Hemmed in by hills around
His house,
Garlands it with
Moonflower blooms.

Nobusada.

268

The Right grumble that ‘alone, she turns’ (sashi nomi mukau) is ‘grating on the ear’, while the Left wonder if ‘gardlands’ (motenasu) is appropriate (it’s not standard in the lexicon of poetry).

Shunzei simply says, ‘Both poems are equally lacking in faults or merits, but yet I feel the Right should win.’

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