伊豆の国やまのみなみにいづるゆのはやきは神のしるしなりけん
| izu no kuni yama no minami ni izuru yu no hayaki wa kami no shirushi nariken | In the land of Izu To the south of the mountain Wells hot water So swiftly does the deity’s Power seem to work. |
643
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Kinkai wakashū 642
Kinkai wakashū 617
When Dharma Master Sosen (he known as Taneyuki at the time) had gone to Shimōsa, I sent this to him in the Eleventh Month, Kenpō 6 [1218] to say he should return.
恋しともおもはでいはば久かたのあまてる神も空にしるらん
| koishi to mo omowade iwaba hisakata no ama teru kami mo sora ni shiruran | That I long for you, Should I not think, but say, The eternal Deity shining in the Heavens, Would know it in the skies.[i] |
617
[i] See: Composed on the conception of felicitation for the poetry match held at the residence of His Excellency, Saneyuki. みづがきのひさしかるべき君が代をあまてる神やそらにしるらん mizugaki no / hisashikarubeki / kimi ga yo o / ama teru kami ya / sora ni shiruran ‘As sacred precincts, / Eternal shall be / My Lord’s reign, as / Shining in the Heavens the deity / In the skies must know!’ Fujiwara no Tametada (Kin’yōshū V: 328)
Eien narabō uta’awase 31
Round Three
Left[i]
君が代は神にぞいのる住之江の松の千年をゆづれとおもへば
| kimi ga yo wa kami ni zo inoru suminoe no matsu no chitose o yuzure to omoeba | My Lord’s reign: To the gods I pray, that Suminoe’s Pines their thousand years Pass on—that is my hope… |
Retired from the World
61a
きみがへむやちよのかずはあめにますとよをかひめの神やしるらん
| kimi ga hemu yachiyo no kazu wa ame ni masu toyo’okahime no kami ya shiruran | That my Lord will endure The number of eight thousand ages— Residing in the heavens, The Goddess of the Eternal Hills, The deity, knows well, no doubt! |
Retired from the World
61b
Right (Win)
君がよはつきじとぞおもふ春の日の御笠の山にささむかぎりは
| kimi ga yo wa tsukiji to zo omou haru no hi no mikasa no yama ni sasamu kagiri wa | My Lord’s reign Will never fade, I feel! While in spring the sun Upon Mikasa Mountain Shines down… |
Senior Assistant Minister Past Lecturer
62
Both Left and Right have neither strengths nor weakness in their diction and sense, but I feel that ‘While in spring the sun / Upon Mikasa Mountain / Shines down’ is a bit more dependable at present than ‘Suminoe’s / Pines their thousand years’.
It is certainly not the case that there are no dubious elements about the Left’s poem. As ‘eight thousand ages’ is a definite number, what is it that the Goddess of the Eternal Hills is expected to know? If this is something in the deity’s hands, then it should be, ‘does not even know the number’. I’m sure the Goddess herself would ask what she’s expected to know. The Right seems stronger.
[i] There are different poems by Eien this round in different versions of the text of the contest. As can be inferred from the judgements, Mototoshi saw the first poem and Toshiyori the second. This strongly suggests that Mototoshi’s judgements were circulated before the text of the contest was submitted to Toshiyori, and Eien revised his poem this round as a result (Kubota et al. 2018, 308).
Fubokushō IX: 3762
From the poetry match at Tsurayuki’s house in the Second Month, Tengyō 2 – The end of summer.
むかしより思ふ心はみな月のみそぎの神ぞ空にしるらん
| mukashi yori omou kokoro wa minazuki no misogi no kami zo sora ni shiruran | For a long time now, Yearning has filled my heart: In the Sixth Month The purifying deity Seems to know it well, within the skies. |
Anonymous
Naidaijin-ke uta’awase 28
Round Four
Left (Both Judges – Win)
こひわぶる君が雲ゐの月ならば及ばぬ身にも影はみてまし
| koiwaburu kimi ga kumoi no tsuki naraba oyobanu mi ni mo kage wa mitemashi | So cruel in your love, My lord, above the clouds The moon were you, then Though it reaches me not I wish your light to see… |
Lady Kazusa
55
Right
いのるらん神のたたりはなさるとも逢ふてふ事に身をばけがさじ
| inoruran kami no tatari wa nasaru tomo au chō koto ni mi oba kegasaji | You seem to pray for it, and Even should a deity’s taboo This break, A meeting Would be no pollution, I feel… |
Lord Akinaka
56
Toshiyori states: the first poem makes a person into the moon, and is different in sense from the poem in the Tentoku poetry match which also uses ‘Though it reaches me not’. The second poem appears to be one written after becoming close to another—if that’s what the composition is about, then it should include an element from a prior poem for precedent. Then again, one could compose like this as a response to a prayer received from a man’s residence, in which case it would resemble something sent between people who have yet to meet. It loses.
Mototoshi states: saying ‘My lord, above the clouds / The moon were you, then’ appears an elegant sequence. I wonder if it was composed with the poem by Nakatsukasa in a poetry match in Tenryaku, where she uses ‘above the clouds, the moon’? While the ‘beloved light’ in this poem is very well depicted, here the diction seems stilted. As for the Right, up to ‘You seem to pray for it, and /Even should a deity’s taboo’ is acceptable, but ‘A meeting / Would be no pollution, I feel’ is extremely difficult to understand. Would a meeting, of whatever sort, be a cause of pollution? It really makes me feel as if something like ‘ditch’ was going to be dropped in! Neither has a charming conception, yet ‘above the clouds, the moon’ is slightly better in the present context.
Sumiyoshi-sha uta’awase kaō ni-nen 74
Round Twenty-Four
Left (Tie)
なにごとをまつとはなしにすみよしのかみにこころをかけぬまぞなき
| nanigoto o matsu to wa nashi ni sumiyoshi no kami ni kokoro o kakenu ma zo naki | Nothing in particular Have I to expect, but Sumiyoshi’s Deity within my heart Dwells not for no moments at all! |
Shōkaku
147
Right
いたづらにおいにけるかないにしへの人のうゑけむすぎならなくに
| itazura ni oinikeru naka inishie no hito no uekemu sugi naranaku ni | How brief it’s been, but I have grown old, though By ancient Folk a planted Cedar tree I’m not… |
Jakuchō
148
The conception of the Left’s poem, saying ‘Have I to expect, but’ sounds extremely charming, but the configuration of the poem of the Right, composing ‘Folk a planted / Cedar tree I’m not’ also appears pleasant. Thus, these tie.
Sumiyoshi-sha uta’awase kaō ni-nen 72
Round Twenty-Two
Left
おひやらぬいはねのまつはわれなれやひさしくよよにみどりなるかな
| oiyaranu iwane no matsu wa ware nare ya hisashiku yoyo ni midori naru kana | A spindly Pine growing in the crag-cracks Am I? Forever through the years I am stuck at green! |
Minamoto no Munenaga
143
Right (Win)
いけみづのいひいでずともおもひかねふかきうれへをかみはしるらむ
| ikemizu no ii’idezu tomo omoikane fukaki uree o kami wa shiruramu | As pond waters behind A sluice gate, I say nothing, yet I cannot help but wonder: The depths of my despair— Does the deity know it? |
Fujiwara no Noritsune
144
The conception of the Left’s poem, saying, ‘Forever through the years’ sounds pleasant, but I feel it’s a bit hackneyed, given the poem, ‘Solitary pinecone / Is green!’[1] The poem of the Right’s ‘As pond waters behind / A sluice gate, I say’ is also pedestrian, yet ‘The depths of my despair— / Does the deity know it?’ contains some conception. It’s a little better, I’d say.
[1] Composed when he had gone to the residence of Narisuke, the Chief Priest of Kamo, when drunk, was sorrowing that he had yet to be promoted. もみぢするかつらのなかにすみよしのまつのみひとりみどりなるかな momijisuru / katsura no naka ni / sumiyoshi no / matsu no mi hitori / midori naru kana ‘Among the scarlet-leaved / Katsura, / Sumiyoshi’s / Solitary pinecone / Is green!’ Kunimoto, the Governor of Tsu (GSIS XVII: 987)
Sumiyoshi-sha uta’awase kaō ni-nen 61
Round Eleven
Left
ねざめしてうきよをおもひあはすればまどろむゆめにかはらざりけり
| nezameshite uki yo o omoi awasureba madoromu yume ni kawarazarikeri | When I awake, with This cruel world my thoughts Occupying, The dream that filled my doze Differed not at all… |
Hyōenokami
121
Right (Win)
すみのえのうきにおひたるしをれあしをなみひきたてよかみのめぐみに
| suminoe no uki ni oitaru shiore’ashi o nami hikitateyo kami no megumi ni | In Suminoe’s Muddy waters grows, Languishing, a reed: O, waves, lift it upright! To receive the deity’s blessing… |
Lord Michichika
122
The poem of the Left appears to have an elegant sequence, saying, ‘This cruel world my thoughts / Occupying’, but the speaker does not appear to be particularly thinking of themselves—they are simply reflecting on the transience of this world and that’s how it is. The poem of the Right begins with ‘In Suminoe’ and then has ‘Muddy waters grows’, linking the particular shore with the content. The Right should win.
Sumiyoshi-sha uta’awase kaō ni-nen 58
Round Eight
Left
よのなかをうみわたりつつとしへぬることはつもりのかみやたすけむ
| yo no naka o umiwataritsutsu toshi henuru koto wa tsumori no kami ya tasukemu | In this mundane world, An endless sea of suffering, Have my years gone by; Might Tsumori’s Deity save me, I wonder? |
Dharma Master Shun’e
115
Right (Win)
いへのかぜわがみのうへにすずしかれかみのしるしをあふぐとならば
| ie no kaze wa ga mi no ue ni suzushikare kami no shirushi o augu to naraba | My house’s breeze of fortune To my sorry self I would bring cool, if For a sign from the God I were to seek… |
Lord Sanekuni
116
The Left’s conception is charming, beginning with ‘An endless sea of suffering’ and following this with ‘Might Tsumori’s / Deity save me, I wonder?’, but ‘endless sea of suffering’ does not sound like acceptable diction. The Right’s conception of ‘For a sign from the God / I were to seek’ sounds charming, so I make it the winner.
