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Love V: 25

Left (Win).
枕にも跡にも露の玉散りてひとり起きゐる小夜の中山

makura ni mo
ato ni mo tsuyu no
tama chirite
hitori oki’iru
sayo no naka yama
Upon my pillow and
My foot prints both, dew
Drops have fallen
Awakening alone in
Sayo-no-Nakayama.

A Servant Girl
889

Right.
草枕ひとりあかしの浦風にいとゞ涙ぞ落ちまさりける

kusamakura
hitori akashi no
ura kaze ni
itodo namida zo
ochimasarikeru
Pillowed on the grass,
Alone at dawn in Akashi,
The breeze from the bay
Makes even more tears
Fall.

Lord Tsune’ie.
890

The Right state they have no criticisms of the Left’s poem. The Left merely say that the Right’s poem is ‘old-fashioned’.

Shunzei’s judgement: The Left’s ‘dew drops’ (tsuyu no tama) falling so widely at Sayo-no-Nakayama one can surmise to be deeply expressive of the concept of travel. The Right’s Akashi Bay is a place strongly associated with the sad sound of the wind and the waves, but the final ‘makes even more fall’ (ochimasarikeru) is insufficient. Thus, the Left should win.

Love V: 11

Left (Win).
葉を若みまだふし馴れぬ呉竹のこはしほるべき露の上かは

ha o wakami
mada fushinarenu
kuretake no
ko wa shiorubeki
tsuyu no ue ka wa
Fresh leaved, and
Not yet grown to knots in bed,
A bamboo
Maid: will she draw the
Kindly dew upon her?

Lord Sada’ie.
861

Right.
情なき風に従ふ姫百合は露けきことやならはざるらん

nasakenaki
kaze ni shitagau
himeyuri wa
tsuyukeki koto ya
narawazaruran
The heartless
Wind brushes
A young star lily:
To being dew drenched
Is she, perhaps, unaccustomed?

Lord Tsune’ie.
862

The Right state: the Left’s poem has not faults to indicate. The Left state: the Right’s poem lacks the conception of Love.

In judgement: the Left uses ‘bamboo’ (kuretake) and the Right ‘star lily’ (himeyuri): although the Left’s ‘Maid: will she draw’ (ko wa shiorubeki) does not seem possible to accept on grounds of style, but the Right, in addition to also lacking much conception of Love, has ‘heartless wind’ (nasakenaki kaze) which sounds poor. Thus, the Left should win, I think.

 

SZS VIII: 531

Composed as a travel poem, when the Regent and Former Minister of the Right had a hundred poem sequence composed at his residence.

あはれなる野しまかさきのいほりかな露おく袖に浪もかけけり

awarenaru
nojima ga saki no
iori kana
tsuyu oku sode ni
nami mo kakekeri
Mournful
Nojima Point is where
My hut lies;
Upon my dew-dropped sleeves
Have rushed the waves…

Master of the Dowager Empress Household Office, Toshinari
皇太后宮大夫俊成

Tentoku 4 Dairi uta’awase 30-31

Left.

夏草のなかを露けみかき分けて刈る人なしにしげる野辺かな

natu kusa no
naka o tuyukemi
kakiwakete
karu Fito nasi ni
sigeru nobe kana
The summer grasses
Midst is dew-drenched;
Forging through,
With no one to reap them
This meadow is lush, indeed!

Tadami

Right.

夏ふかくなりぞしにけるおほあらきの杜の下草なべて人かる

natu Fukaku
nari zo sinikeru
oFoaraki no
mori no sitagusa
nabete Fito karu
Deep within the summer
It is now:
At Ōaraki
In the sacred groves, the undergrowth
Is arrayed for men to reap it!

Kanemori

Love IV: 17

Left (Win).
大方の露は干る間ぞ別れける我が袖一つ殘る雫に

ōkata no
tsuyu wa hiruma zo
wakarekeru
wa ga sode hitotsu
nokoru shizuku ni
In general,
The dew would daytime dry become
While we are parted, but
On my sleeves alone
Remain droplets…

Lord Sada’ie.
813

Right.
明ぬればひると聞しをいかなれば戀する袖は濡れまさる覧

akenureba
hiru to kikishi o
ika nareba
koisuru sode wa
nuremasaruran
When daylight comes
Dry they should be, I heard, but
Why is it, then, that
The sleeves of one in love are
So exceedingly damp?

Lord Tsune’ie.
814

The Right state: the conception of the Left’s poem is somewhat unclear. The Left state: the contents of the Right’s poem are pedestrian.

In judgement: is the conception of the Left’s poem, of the droplets remaining on one’s sleeves throughout the day being dewfall really that unclear? On hearing the Right’s akenureba hiru, I wondered what had happened to the morning? In addition, just having hiru and not hiruma is confusing. The poem does not say enough.

Love IV: 4

Left.
つれなさの類までやはつらからぬ月をも愛でじ在明の空

tsurenasa no
tagui made ya wa
tsurakaranu
tsuki o mo medeji
ariake no sora
Heartless on parting are you,
And just so is the
Indifferent
Moon – no more will I care for it! –
In the sky at dawn.

Lord Ari’ie.
787

Right (Win).
逢ふと見る情もつらし暁の露のみ深き夢の通い路

au to miru
nasake mo tsurashi
akatsuki no
tsuyu nomi fukaki
yume no kayoiji
We met, I saw, and
How fond were you, but how cruel
The dawn, when
I was drenched with dew alone from
The path of dreams…

Lord Takanobu.
788

The Gentlemen of the Right state: if the Left allude to the poem ‘At the dawning / How cruel it seemed / To part’, then this poem refers to the cruelty of a lover, but their poem suggests that the moon is the cruel one. Is this appropriate? In response: ‘At the dawning / How cruel it seemed’ can also be interpreted as referring to the moon. The Gentlemen of the Left state: the Right use the diction ‘fond’ (nasake), but the sense of this does not follow in the poem.

In judgement: the Left builds on the poem which starts ‘At the dawning / How cruel it seemed / To part, but’ and then says more than the lover’s heartlessness, ‘The fading moon / Cared not at all.’ So, given that this is the case, it’s not really saying anything different from ‘No more will I care for the moon!’ As for the Right, it sounds as if the lover’s fondness appears in the ‘dream’ (yume), but the final section seems good. The Right’s poem is somewhat superior.

Love III: 19

Left.
引かへて荒き氣色をみだらおのこまごまとこそ恨かけつれ

hikikaete
araki keshiki o
midarao no
komagoma to koso
uramikaketure
You have changed, and
Dishevelled in appearance
As a piebald
Colt, you are not, yet
I hate you still!

Kenshō
757

Right (Win).
露しげき秋の野も狭の眞葛原いつまでよその物と聞きけん

tsuyu shigeki
aki no no mo se no
makuzubara
itsu made yoso no
mono to kikiken
Dew drenched,
The autumn field is all
Covered with kuzu,
For how long will such distant
Whispers reach me?

Lord Takanobu
758

The Right state: the Left’s poem sounds pretentious. We are also unable to accept the use of ‘colt, you are not’ (komagoma). The Left state: the Right’s poem sounds archaic.

In judgement: ‘Dishevelled in appearance as a piebald’ (araki keshiki o midarao) is entirely unacceptable style. As for ‘covered with kuzu’, while ‘field is all’ (no mo se) is also undesirable, the final section is elegant. It should win over ‘piebald’.