佐保山柞の紅葉薄けれど秋は深くもなりにけるかな
| saFoyama no FaFaso no momidi usukeredo aki Fa Fukaku mo narinikeru kana |
At Saoyama The oaks’ yellow leaves Are pale, yet Autumn so deep Has become! |
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Eikyū hyakushu 308
Eikyū hyakushu 306
Eikyū hyakushu 304
Kokin rokujō VI: 4095
Autumn III: 12
Left (Win).
時分かぬ浪さへ色に泉川柞の杜に嵐吹らし
| toki wakanu nami sae iro ni izumigawa hahaso no mori ni arashi fukurashi |
Ever unchanging, Even the waves have coloured On Izumi River; In the oak groves Have the wild winds blown. |
443
Right.
秋深き岩田の小野の柞原下葉は草の露や染らん
| aki fukaki iwata no ono no hahasowara shitaba wa kusa no tsuyu ya somuran |
Autumn’s deep at Iwata-no-Ono In the oak groves Have the lower leaves by grass Touched dewfall been dyed? |
444
Neither team has any criticisms to make of the other’s poem.
Shunzei’s judgement: The total effect of the Left’s ‘even the waves have coloured on Izumi River’ (nami sae iro in izumigawa) is most superior [sugata wa yū narubeshi]. However, there does not appear to be any element linked to the final section’s ‘wild winds’ (arashi) in the initial part of the poem. The Right has ‘have the lower leaves by grass touched dewfall been dyed?’ (shitaba wa kusa no tsuyu ya somuran), without, in the initial section having an expression like ‘treetops stained by showers’ (kozue wa shigure somu), and I wonder about having the lower leaves on the trees touched by ‘dewfall on the grass’ (kusa no tsuyu). The Left’s ‘have the wild winds blown’ should win.
Autumn III: 11
Left (Win).
柞原雫も色や變るらむ杜の下草秋更けにけり
| hahasowara shizuku mo iro mo kawaruramu mori no shitagusa aki fukenikeri |
In the oak grove Have the raindrops, too, their hues A’changed? For to the grass beneath the sacred boughs Has autumn come! |
441
Right.
あたりまで梢さびしき柞原深くは何を思こむらん
| atari made kozue sabishiki hahasowara fukaku wa nani o omoikomuran |
From all around The treetops in the lonely Oak grove Deep within what Thoughts would fill one’s mind? |
442
The Right have no criticisms to make of the Left’s poem. The Left query the usage of ‘from all around’ (atari made).
Shunzei’s judgement: The Right’s poem would certainly appear to have an in-depth grasp of the conception of the topic [makoto ni kokoro komorige ni miete], however, my shallow understanding is unable to follow it; besides which the Left’s ‘to the grass beneath the sacred boughs has autumn come!’ (mori no shitagusa aki fukenikeri) is most fine [yoroshiku habereba], so I have no need for further consideration and make the Left the winner.
MYS IX: 1730
Autumn III: 10
Left.
松陰にいかで時雨の漏りつらん岩本柞初紅葉せり
| matsu kage ni ikade shigure no moritsuran iwamoto hahaso hatsu momijiseri |
Beneath the pine trees’ shade Why has the shower Drenched all? The oak tree, at the crag-foot Has its first scarlet leaf. |
439
Right.
山科の岩田の小野に秋暮れて風に色ある柞原かな
| yamashina no iwata no ono ni aki kurete kaze ni iro aru hahasowara kana |
In Yamashina At Iwata-no-Ono Autumn is almost done Its hues are in the wind Upon the oak groves. |
440
The Right ask whether the Left can cite a poem as a precedent for the expression ‘oak tree, at the crag-foot’ (iwamoto hahaso). The Left respond that they cannot bring one to mind immediately. However, ‘crag-foot’ is often used about a range of plants of various kinds. Thus, where is the fault in using it? The Left have no criticisms to make of the Right’s poem.
Shunzei’s judgement: It is not particularly important whether there is a precedent for the Left’s use of ‘oak tree, at the crag-foot’ [shōka no yūmu ni oyobubekarazu]. The final section, ‘has its first scarlet leaf’(hatsu momijiseri), however, given that what comes before is a standard poem [tsune no uta], is somewhat over-explicit [niwaka ni kotogotoshiku haberumere]. The Right’s poem has nothing particular to say. Starting with ‘Yamashina’ sounds overly blunt [amari ni tashika ni kikoetaru]. In addition, the final section displays no deep thought [munen narubeshi]. So, again, the round is a tie.
Autumn III: 9
Left.
秋ぞかし岩田の小野のいはずとも柞が原に紅葉やはせん
| aki zo kashi wata no ono no iwazutomo hahaso ga hara ni momiji ya wa sen |
It’s Autumn! At Iwata-no-Ono, Needless to say, The oak groves, all, Are turning to scarlet leaves. |
437
Right.
薄く濃くことは變れど柞原梢にこぞる秋の色かな
| usuku koku koto wa kawaredo hahasowara kozue ni kozoru aki no iro kana |
First dark, then light They change, yet, Upon the oak groves’ Treetops gather All the hues of autumn… |
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438
The Right find no fault with the Left’s poem. The Left state that they find ‘gather’ (kozoru) ‘grating on the ear’ [kikiyokarazu] and ‘clumsy’ [tezutsu].
Shunzei’s judgement: Starting a poem with ‘It’s Autumn!’ is a usage of diction which I must hope will be considered charming [kotobazukai okashikaran to shokiseru narubeshi]! The Right’s ‘treetops gather’ (kozue ni kozoru) is somewhat unexpected wording [sukoshi wa omoikakenu kotoba ni wa haberedo], yet one cannot call it ‘clumsy’. So, with nothing superlative or at fault with either poem, the round ties.