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Eien narabō uta’awase 23

Round Two

Left

ゆきふればしるしのすぎもはなさきてみわの山べもいかがたづねむ

yuki fureba
shirushi no sugi mo
hana sakite
miwa no yamabe mo
ikaga tazunemu
When the snow has fallen,
The symbolic cedars, too,
Bloom with blossom—
To Miwa’s mountainside
How might I make my way?

Lord Saburō
45

Right (Win)

しらゆきにふるの山みちうづもれてたどるばかりになりもゆくかな

shirayuki ni
furu no yamamichi
uzumorete
tadoru bakari ni
nari mo yuku kana
In snow, so white,
Furu’s ancient mountain paths
Are buried, so
Simply I must feel my way
As I go along!

Ushigimi
46

The Left’s poem is an entirely transparent adaptation of an earlier work. This poem is:

ふる雪に印の杉もうづもれていづこなるらむ三輪の山本

furu yuki ni
shirushi no sugi mo
uzumorete
izuko naruruamu
miwa no yamamoto
In the falling snow,
Even the symbolic cedars
Are buried
Where might be
Miwa mountain’s foot?[i]

The Right’s poem has nothing of interest about it, nor does it have any faults to indicate. Thus, there are insufficient grounds for judgement.

The Left’s poem follows the conception of a poem which appeared in the Kaya Palace Poetry Match.[ii] Although this is an earlier work, truly, it’s not that good, and so this poem doesn’t seem that superlative. Why couldn’t one visit if blossom has simply bloomed? The former poem says it would be difficult to get there because it’s buried in snow. The Right’s poem isn’t that good, but it seems better than the Left, so it should win.


[i] The source of this poem is unclear, however,

[ii] Snow. ふるゆきにすぎのあをばもうづもれてしるしも見えずみわのやまもと furu yuki ni / sugi no aoba mo / uzumorete / shirushi mo miezu / miwa no yamamoto ‘In the falling snow / The green cedar needles / Are buried, so / The symbol goes unseen, / Of Miwa mountain’s foot.’ Lady Settsu (Kaya no in shichiban uta’awase 55). This poetry match, Kaya no in shichiban uta’awase 高陽院七番歌合 (‘Seven Round Poetry Match held at the Kaya Palace’), was sponsored by Fujiwara no Morozane 藤原師実 (1042-1101) and held on the 19th day of the Eighth Month, Kahō 1 [1.10.1094]. The judge, Minamoto no Tsunenobu 源経信 (1016-1097), approved of this poem, saying it was ‘extremely charming’. It was later included in Kin’yōshū (IV: 285), with the headnote, ‘Composed on the conception of snow at the Poetry Match held at the Residence of the Former Uji Chancellor’.

Tsurayuki uta’awase 10

The End of Autumn.

Left

琴の音に声よりあはせなく虫の秋のはつるはえこそしのばね

koto no ne ni
koe yori awase
naku mushi no
aki no hatsuru wa
e koso shinobane
A zither’s strains
Blended with the songs
The insects cry,
That autumn is ending
They truly cannot recall!

19

Right

長月の菊にぞ人をたのみつる花ひらくとも心うつるな

nagatsuki no
kiku zo hito o
tanomitsuru
hana hiraku tomo
kokoro utsuru na
In the Longest Month
A chrysanthemum, in a man
Has placed its trust—
The bloom may open, yet
O, change not your heart!

20

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Love

Left

恋といへばまづいでたちて春も皆ゆくらむ方も知らずもあるかな

koi to ieba
mazu idetachite
haru mo mina
yukuramu kata mo
shirazu mo aru kana
This thing called love
Has gone before, and
The spring, too, no one
It’s destination
Knows at all!

11

Right

年毎に花におくるるみにしあれば恋ひせぬ春のなきぞわびしき

toshi goto ni
hana ni okururu
mi ni shi areba
koisenu haru no
naki zo wabishiki
Every single year
Missing the blossom
Is my sorry self,
A springtime with no one to love
Is there not, but still sad and lonely am I!

12

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The end of spring

Left

あだなりと世にいふ花は散らずしてすぎゆく春ぞかひなかりける

adanari to
yo ni iu hana wa
chirazushite
sugiyuku haru zo
kainakarikeru
Faithless, does
The world call blossom,
Not scattering with
The passage of spring, so
What’s the point to it!

9

Right

花もみなおのが散り散りはかなきを春を見すててゆくぞかなしき

hana mo mina
ono ga chirijiri
hakanaki o
haru o misutete
yuku zo kanashiki
The blossoms, every one,
Scatter themselves
So fleetingly, and
Heedlessly abandon spring, so
Sad its departure is.

10

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Love

Left

わが恋は春のなかばになりにけり花のにほひに影やみゆると

wa ga koi wa
haru no nakaba ni
narinikeri
hana no nioi ni
kage ya miyuru to
My love
In the heart of spring
Has come about:
In the glow of blossom
Can I see her face…

7

Right

春はなほくるしかりけりさくら花いろのつきつつ恋のまされば

haru wa nao
kurushikarikeri
sakurabana
iro no tsukitsutsu
koi no masareba
Spring is ever
Full of pain:
The cherry blossoms’
Hues exhausted, as
My love is at its strongest…

8

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Round Six

Left (Win)

やへざくらふるきみやこににほへどもふりずもはなのめづらしきかな

yaezakura
furuki miyako ni
nioedomo
furizu mo hana no
mezurashiki kana
Eightfold cherry
Around the ancient capital
Does glow, yet
Unfallen and anew, the blossoms
Are remarkable!

Cell of Fragrant Cloud
11

Right

みやこいでてかりそめにこし山ざとの花に心のからめられぬる

miyako idete
karisome ni koshi
yamazato no
hana ni kokoro no
karamerarenuru
Departing the capital
On occasion I make my way
To a mountain retreat where
The blossoms my heart
Have entangled.

Cell of Compassionate Light
12

The Left’s poem is a clear example of the overlayed diction fault. As for the Right’s poem, saying ‘have entangled’ is extremely overblown diction. Whatever sort of poem it might be, this expression would be unacceptable, wouldn’t it! Was this, perhaps, composed with an imperfect understanding of the Kawara Minister’s poem? That goes ‘For the scented / Breeze has yet to blow…’[1] Perhaps this is a misreading of a character in the poem’s text?[i] The Left has the fault of overlayed diction, and the Right…[ii]

The Left’s poem is extremely charming. I do have to say that having both ‘ancient’ (furuki) and ‘unfallen’ (furizu) is a fault and yet, this should not be criticized excessively. The poem of the Right’s ‘On occasion I make my way’, too, does not seem as if the poet is visiting the blossom, and so is lacking in sentiment. The concluding ‘have entangled’ is a piece of overblown diction, although it is not the case that it does not appear in prior poetry,[2] but I still feel that it grates on the ear a bit.


[1] When he participated in an archery display, during the reign of the Jōgan emperor [Seiwa]. けふ桜しづくにわが身いざぬれむかごめにさそふ風のこぬまに kyō sakura / shizuku ni wa ga mi / iza nuremu / kagome ni sasou / kaze no konu ma ni ‘Today let cherry blossom / Droplets my body / Drench! / For the scented / Breeze has yet to blow…’ The Kawara Minister of the Left (GSS II: 56)

[2] 美知乃倍乃 宇万良能宇礼尓 波保麻米乃 可良麻流伎美乎 波可礼加由加牟 michi no e no / umara no ure ni / haomame no / karamaru kimi o / hagareka yukamu ‘At the roadside / The briar rose tips / By bean vines / Are entangled, but from you / My love, I must depart…’ Hasetsukabe no Tori (MYS XX: 4352)


[i] Mototoshi is suggesting that Sōen has misread kagome かこめ in Minamoto no Tōru’s famous earlier poem as karame からめ, which would have been possible if reading a handwritten text.

[ii] There is a lacuna in Mototoshi’s judgement here, but it is clear from what he has said that he disapproved of both poems this round and so it would have been a tie.

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Round Five

Left (Win)

さくらやまはなのさかりに風ふけばこずゑをこして白波ぞたつ

sakurayama
hana no sakari ni
kaze fukeba
kozue o koshite
shiranami zo tatsu
On the mount of Cherries
So fine is the blossom that
When the wind does blow,
Passing o’er the treetops,
Whitecaps arise!

Controller’s Graduate
9

Right

この春ははなにこころのあくがれてこのもとにてもくらしつるかな

kono haru wa
hana ni kokoro no
akugarete
ko no moto nite mo
kurashitsuru kana
This springtime
By the blossoms my heart
Is captivated, and
Beneath the trees
Does dwell!

Kerin’in Graduate
10

Both Left and Right, in terms of diction, tone and style are superb with no faults at all. Thus, this is a tie.

The final section of the Left’s poem lacks fluency, yet it has conception. As for the Right’s poem, in order for one’s heart to be captivated by the blossom on every single treetop, one would need to be walking around. If one is resting peacefully beneath the trees, then one should say that one’s heart is captured. This section sounds erroneous, so the Left should win.

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Round Four

Left (Win)

春の日をなほながかれとおもふかなはな見ることのあかぬこころは

haru no hi o
nao nagakare to
omou kana
hana miru koto no
akanu kokoro wa
O, let the days of spring
Still linger lengthily on,
I wish! For
Gazing on the blossom
Has yet to sate my heart…

Cell of the Fragrant Elephant
7

Right

ことしもやあだにちりぬる山ざくらさもあさましきはなのくせかな

kotoshi mo ya
ada ni chirinuru
yamazakura
sa mo asamashiki
hana no kuse kana
This year, too, will
You swiftly scatter,
O, mountain cherry?
That is a wretched
Habit blossoms have!

Cell of the Everlasting Truth
8

The poem of the Left’s final section is that of a pre-existing older poem.[i] The poem of the Right’s final section is deplorable. Even so, I make the Right the winner.

Both Left and Right are elegant. With that being said, the Left also sounds charming, while the Right’s concluding ‘habit!’, although it is not a major fault, grates on the ear a bit. This is another win for the Left.


[i] The ending of this poem in the texts of this match with Mototoshi’s judgements is different, with the final line being akanu kagiri wa (‘have yet to sate’). This means it closely resembles: Topic unknown. ゆきとまるところぞはるはなかりける花に心のあかぬかぎりは yukitomaru / tokoro zo haru wa / nakarikeru / hana ni kokoro no / akanu kagiri wa ‘To go and stay / A place in springtime / Have I none / For the blossoms, my heart / Have yet to sate completely.’ Sugawara no Tamenobu (GSIS I: 90). Kubota et al. (2018, 223) suggest that as we know that the version of the match that Toshiyori judged was produced later, this poem may have been revised in the light of Mototoshi’s judgement.

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The middle of spring.[i]

Left

まづ立ちて過ぎにし春はかひもなしとまるは花ものどけからなむ

mazu tachite
suginishi haru wa
kai mo nashi
tomaru wa hana mo
nodokekaranamu
For it first to have arisen and
Then departed—to such a spring
There is no point;
If it stayed then the blossom, too,
Might linger on.

5

Right

さくら花にほふさかりをみるときは心も春のなかにこそいれ

sakurabana
niou sakari o
miru toki wa
kokoro mo haru no
naka ni koso ire
Cherry blossom:
When in glowing profusion
I see, then
My soul, too, spring’s
Heart does enter!

6


[i] Naka no haru 仲の春

Dairi kiku awase – Engi jūsan-nen 01

Poems from a Chrysanthemum Match held by the Senior Courtier Gentlemen in the presence of His Majesty, 13th day of the Tenth Month, Engi 13.


Left

ちりはててはななきときのはななればうつろふいろのをしくもあるかな

chirihatete
hakanaki toki no
hana nareba
utsurou iro no
oshiku mo aru kana
All scattered now,
For such a brief time are
These flowers here;
The fading of their hues
Is something I regret!

Okikaze
1

しらくものうへにしうつるきくなればいたくをにほへはなとみるべく

shiraku mo no
uenishi utsuru
kiku nareba
itaku o nioe
hana to mirubeku
A white cloud,
Planted is this gleaming
Chrysanthemum, so
Bright, indeed, shining
Does the bloom look to be…

Suetada[i]
2

あきすぎてはなざかりなるきくのはないろにたぐひてあきやかへれる

aki sugite
hanazakari naru
kiku no hana
iro ni taguite
aki ya kaereru
Autumn is past and
The flowers richly blooming are
Chrysanthemums:
With their hues
Autumn does return!

Korenori
3

なみとのみうちこそみゆれすみのえのきしにのこれるしらぎくのはな

nami to nomi
uchi koso miyure
suminoe no
kishi ni nokoreru
shiragiku no hana
Simply as waves
Do they, indeed, appear!
At Suminoe
Lingering on the shore
White chrysanthemum blooms.

Korenori
4

わぎもこがひもゆふぐれのきくなればあかずぞはなのいろはみえける

wagimoko ga
hi mo yūgure no
kiku nareba
akazu zo hana no
iro wa miekeru
My darling girl
Both day and eve is
As a chrysanthemum, so
Never sated am I with this flower’s
Hues I see.

Korenori
5

きくのはなふゆののかぜにちりもせでけふまでとてやしもはおくらん

kiku no hana
fuyu no kaze ni
chiri mo sede
kyō made tote ya
shimo wa okuran
Chrysanthemum blooms
In the winter wind
Scatter not;
Is it that up to today is when
Frost is said to fall?

Korenori
6

かげさへやこよひはにほふきくのはなあまてるつきにかのそはるらん

kage sae ya
koyoi wa niou
kiku no hana
ama teru tsuki ni
ka no sowaruran
Even their shape
Fills tonight with a scented glow;
Chrysanthemum blooms
To the heaven-shining moon
Seem to add their fragrance.

Korenori
7


[i] Fujiwara no Suetada/Suenawa 藤原季縄 (?-919). Little is known of Suetada’s life, other than that he was apparently close to Ise 伊勢 and exchanged poems with her. The circumstances of his death, however, are recorded in Yamato monogatari, which relates that he fell ill in Engi 19 (919) when he held the position of Minor Captain in the Inner Palace Guards, Right Division (Ukonoe shōshō右近衛少将). On a day when he was due to be in attendance at the palace, he sent a message to Minamoto no Kintada 源公忠 (889-948), a Chamberlain and the Assistant Director of the Bureau of Housekeeping, to say that illness prevented his being there. Kintada replied that he should attend without fail on the day after tomorrow, but when that day came, Suetada sent him the following poem:

くやしくぞ のちにあはむと 契りける 今日をかぎりと 言はましものを

kuyashiku zo
nochi ni awamu to
chigirikeru
kyō o kagiri to
iwamashi mono o
I am struck with bitterness!
Once more would we meet
Did I vow, but
Today I meet my end—
That is what I would say…

SKKS VIII: 854

Concerned, Kintada ordered up a carriage and went immediately to Suetada’s residence, only to find he had died before he arrived. Greatly downcast, he returned to the palace and reported Suetada’s death to the emperor.