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Love VIII: 12

Left (Tie)
思ひかねうち寢る宵もありなまし吹だにすさめ庭の松風

omoikane
uchineru yoi mo
arinamashi
fuki dani susame
niwa no matsukaze
Unable to bear the pains of love, and
Dozing through the night –
That happens sometimes;
O, just blow gently,
Breeze through the garden pines!

A Servant Girl
1043

Right
思ひかねながむれば又夕日さす軒端の岡の松もうらめし

omoikane
nagamureba mata
yūhi sasu
nokiba no oka no
matsu mo urameshi
Unable to bear the pains of love,
When I gaze out, once more
The evening sun shines
Past my eaves, where on the hillside
Even the pines seem resentful…

Ietaka
1044

Same as the previous round.

In judgement: here we have ‘O, just blow gently’ (fuki dani susame), and the Right has ‘Past my eaves, where on the hillside’ (nokiba no oka no): these recollect the poems ‘in the depths of sleep I tread to you’ (uchinuru naka ni yukikayou) and ‘the beams strike the hillside through the pine needles’ (sasu ya okabe no  matsu no ha); both sound elegant. I make this round a tie.

Minbukyō yukihira no uta’awase 10

Left
時鳥今宵はとまれ片岡の朝の原に帰りやせぬ

Fototogisu
koyoFi Fa tomare
katawoka no
asita no Fara ni
kaFeri ya senu
O, cuckoo
Stay here this night, and
Down the hillside
With the morning to the plain
Will you not return?

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Right
我が宿に声な惜しみそ時鳥通ふ千里のゆきはてぞ此は

wa ga yado ni
kowe na osimi so
Fototogisu
kayoFu tisato no
yukiFate zo ko Fa
At my home
I regret not your song,
O, cuckoo,
For your thousand league
Journey’s end lies here.

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