Left.
我戀に深さくらへば外山哉吉野の奧の岩のかけ道
wa ga koi ni
fukasa kuraeba
toyama kana
yoshino no oku no
iwa no kakemichi |
My love’s
Depth were you to measure,
Distant mountains, perhaps?
As in the heart of Yoshino, where
The craggy paths are overgrown! |
Lord Ari’ie.
963
Right (Win).
ふみ見ても馴れぬけしきのつれなさや吉野の奧の岩のかけ道
fumi mitemo
narenu keshiki no
tsurenasa ya
yoshino no oku no
iwa no kakemichi |
She read my letter – I treading on paths unknown –
And cared not – an unfamiliar scene –
Is her cruelty
As in the heart of Yoshino, where
The craggy paths are overgrown? |
Ietaka.
964
The Right state: in the Left’s poem, the expression ‘distant mountains, perhaps’ (toyama kana) sounds poor. The Left state: the Right’s poem has no faults to mention.
In judgement: both Left and Right have precisely identical sections: ‘as in the heart of Yoshino’ (yoshino no oku) and ‘craggy paths are overgrown’ (iwa no kakemichi), but considering the initial sections, it has already been stated that the Left’s sounds poor, while the Right lacks faults. Thus, in accordance with the remarks by the Gentlemen of both teams, the Right is the winner.
山川の岩こす波にうちそへて谷 響くなり蟬の諸声
yamakawa no
iwa kosu nami ni
uchisoete
tani hibiku nari
semi no morogoe |
Mountain torrents
Cross the rocks in waves
Along with
The echoes in the valley
From the swarming cicadas’ songs. |
Minamoto no Akinaka
[One of] five poems composed when dropping anchor at Nagadojima in Aki province.
石走る瀧もとどろに鳴く蝉の声をし聞けば都し思ほゆ
ipabasiru
taki mo todoro ni
naku semi no
kowe o si kikeba
miyako si omopoyu |
Running o’er the rocks
Cataracts resound –
When the singing cicadas
Song I hear
The capital comes to my thoughts. |
Ōishi no Minomaro
大石蓑麻呂
Left (Tie).
象潟や妹戀ひしらにさ寢る夜の磯の寢覺に月傾きぬ
kisakata ya
koishirani
sanuru yo no
iso no nezame ni
tsuki katabukinu |
In Kisakata and
In love;
I sleep the night away, and
Awaking on the rocky shore
Behold the moon descending. |
Kenshō
897
Right.
清見潟岩敷く袖の浪の上に思ふもわびし君が面影
kiyomigata
iwa shiku sode no
nami no ue ni
omou mo wabishi
kimi ga omokage |
At Kiyomigata
Sleeves spread atop the rocks,
Waves breaking atop them;
Heart filled with pain
At the memory of your face… |
Jakuren
898
Left and Right both state that the opposing poem is pretentious.
In judgement: the Left’s poem seems well-constructed in its initial and final sections. However, as in Mototoshi’s poem long ago, ‘breaking a stem of miscanthus on the beach at Ise’, this seems to be a case of poetic allusion. The Right’s ‘Sleeves spread atop the rocks, waves breaking atop them’ (iwa shiku sode no nami no ue) seems to have been newly composed and seems elegant, but the final section is somewhat inferior. The Left has beginning and end matching. The Right has a superior initial section, but an inferior final one. Thus, the round ties.
Topic unknown.
種しあれば岩にも松は生ひにけり恋をし恋ひば逢はざらめやは
tane si areba
iFa ni mo matu Fa
oFinikeri
koFi o si koFiba
aFazarame ya Fa |
A seed there was, then
Atop the crags a pine tree
Grew;
Being so in love,
How is it that we do not meet? |
Anonymous
Composed to be presented as part of a hundred poem sequence, when former Emperor Reizei was Crown Prince.
風をいたみ岩うつ波の己のみくだけてものを思ふ頃かな
kaze wo itami
iFa utu nami no
onore nomi
kudakete mono wo
omoFu koro kana |
The howling winds
Strike waves against the crags;
I alone,
Am shattered, gloom
Filling my thoughts these days… |
Minamoto no Shigeyuki
源重之
戸無瀬河岩間に立たむ筏師や浪に濡れても暮を待つらん
tonasegawa
iwama ni tatamu
ikadashi ya
nami ni nuretemo
kure o matsuran |
At the river Tonase
Bursting from between the rocks
The raftsman
If he would be wet with waves
Should surely wait for evening? |
Fujiwara no Toshinari
From ‘The Hundred Poem Sequence Composed at the House of the Minister of the Right’ (1172)
A travel poem, included in a hundred poem sequence sent to be read by the Monk En’i.
岩根ふみ峰の椎柴折りしきて雲に宿かるゆふぐれの空
iFane Fumi
mine no siFisiba
worisikite
kumo ni yadokaru
yuFugure no sora |
Treading ‘cross the deep-rooted crags
From brushwood on the peak
I break branches and spread them
Making my lodging beneath the clouds
Gazing at the evening skies… |
Jakuren
Left (Win).
山吹の花のさかりになりぬとや折知りがほに蛙鳴くらん
yamabuki no
hana no sakari ni
narinu to ya
ori shirigao ni
kawazu nakuran |
Golden kerria
Blooms their peak
Have reached, so
Seeming to know the season
Do the frogs sing on. |
Lord Suetsune.
157
Right.
谷水の岩もる音はうづもれてすだく河づの聲のみぞする
tanimizu no
iwa moru oto wa
uzumorete
sudaku kawazu no
koe nomi zo suru |
Waters in the valley
Soak the rocks – the sound
Swallowed by
Swarming frogs’
Singular songs. |
Ietaka.
158
Both teams say that they consider the other’s poem to be ‘trite’ [kyūbutsu] this round.
Shunzei’s judgement: The Left’s poem certainly certainly has a conception [kokoro] which one is well-accustomed to hearing, but I am unable to recall exactly where. In form it is well-constructed [utazama yoroshikuhaberubeshi]. The Right’s initial “Waters in the valley soak the rocks – the sound swallowed” (tanimizu no iwa moru oto wa uzumorete) is excellent [yū], but the latter part is definitely old-fashioned [furite]. Thus, the Left must win.
'Simply moving and elegant'