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Love II: 6

Left (Win).

幾夜我浪にしほれて貴舟河袖に玉散る物思ふらん

ikuyo ware
nami ni shiorete
kifunegawa
sode ni tama chiru
mono omouran
Nights without number will I
Drench with the waves
Of Kifune River,
Scatter jewels on my sleeves –
Should these thoughts consume me so?

A Servant Girl.

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Right.

貴船川百瀬の浪も分過ぬ濡れ行く袖の末を頼みて

kifunegawa
momose no nami mo
wakesuginu
nureyuku sode no
sue o tanomite
Kifune River’s
Hundredfold waves
Have I crossed;
With soaking sleeves
Do I plead for an ending…

Jakuren.

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The Gentlemen of the Right state: the Left’s poem is fine, overall. The Gentlemen of the Left state: the Right’s poem is without fault.

Shunzei’s judgement: Both Left and Right poems on ‘Kifune River’ (kifunegawa) seem tasteful [], but rather than the Right’s final ‘Do I plead for an ending’ (sue o tanomite), the Left’s ‘Scatter jewels on my sleeves’ (sode ni tama chiru) sounds particularly good. The Left must win.