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Shōji godo hyakushu 461

雲とづる松の枢に知らむ夜はひと声つくる鳥だにもなし

kumo tozuru
matsu no toboso ni
shiramu yo wa
hito koe tsukuru
tori dani mo nashi
Closed in with cloud
By my pinewood door
I know well this night
That to give a single chirp
There is not even one bird.

Fujiwara no Takazane
藤原隆実

Shōji godo hyakushu
正治後度百首
(1200)

Love IV: 11

Left.
雲かゝり重なる山を越えもせず隔てまさるは明くる日の影

kumo kakari
kasanaru yama o
koe mo sezu
hedate masaru wa
akuru hi no kage
Trailed with cloud,
The layered mountains
I have not gone beyond, but
What stands between us most is
The light of the brightening sun.

Lord Sada’ie.
801

Right (Win).
いさ命思ひは夜半に盡き果てぬ夕も待たじ秋の曙

isa inochi
omoi wa yowa ni
tsukihatenu
yūbe mo mataji
aki no akebono
I know not what’s to become of my life!
All my thoughts of love in the hours of night
Are quite exhausted, and
I cannot wait for evening
On this autumn dawn…

Nobusada.
802

The Right state: from ‘Trailed with cloud’ (kumo kakari) to ‘The light of the brightening sun’ (akuru hi no kage), all is entirely unacceptable, is it not? The Left state: we wonder about the acceptability of ‘I know not what’s to become of my life’ (isa inochi).

In judgement: the Right have said that the Left’s poem is unacceptable from beginning to end, but can one really go so far as to say that? Furthermore, the Left query whether ‘I know not what’s to become of my life’, but I wonder whether I can recall this phrase being that bad. However, one is accustomed to saying that ‘this spring dawn’ (haru no akebono) is elegant, and although ‘this autumn dawn’ (aki no akebono) is a modern expression, the faults of the Left’s poem are particularly problematic, so the Right should win.

Love III: 8

Left (Win).

天川秋の七日を眺めつゝ雲のよそにも思ひけるかな

ama no kawa no
aki no nanoka o
nagametsutsu
kumo no yoso ni mo
omoikeru kana
On the River of Heaven, in
Autumn on the Seventh Day
I turn my gaze
For beyond the clouds
Fly my thoughts…

Lord Ari’ie.

735

Right.

かゝりける契ならずは七夕の心のほどをいかで知らまし

kakarikeru
chigiri naraba
tanabata no
kokoro no hodo o
ikade shiramashi
If such
A bond as ours, it was not,
The celestial lovers’
Hearts
I could never understand.

Ietaka.

736

Both Left and Right state: we find no faults to mention, other than the old-fashioned nature of this poem

In judgement: the Left’s poem seems to sound well. It should win.

Love III: 7

Left (Tie).

かたらひし我戀妻やほとゝぎすたまさか山に聲のほのめく

kataraishi
ware koizuma ya
hototogisu
tamasaka yama ni
koe no honomeku
I spoke once
With the girl I love;
A cuckoo
At Mount Tamasaka
Calling briefly

Kenshō.

733

Right.

絶果てぬ情の山に雲消えて晴るゝ心や星合の空

taehatenu
nasake no yama ni
kumo kiete
haruru kokoro ya
hoshiai no sora
Unending
Our gentle connection; the mountain
Freed from cloud,
Warming our hearts
Like, perhaps the skies where stars meet.

Nobusada.

734

The Right state: we do not like the Left’s poem, but find no specific faults worth mentioning. The Left state: we are not accustomed to the expression ‘gentle connection; the mountain’ (nasake no yama)

In judgement: Mount Tamasaka’s cuckoo and the Weaver Maid’s gentle mountain connection are of the same quality.

Love II: 30

Left (Win).

忘れじの契を頼む別かな空行く月の末を數へて

wasureji no
chigiri o tanomu
wakare kana
sora yuku tsuki no
sue o kazoete
Not to forget
I promised – trust that
On our parting.
The moon’s transit through the sky
Is the number of our meeting.

A Servant Girl

719

Right.

風吹かば峰に別れん雲をだにありし名殘の形見とも見よ

kaze fukaba
mine ni wakaren
kumo o dani
arishi nagori no
katami to mo miyo
If the wind should blow,
Parting from the peak,
Even the clouds
My memories
Seem to represent!

Ietaka

720

The Gentlemen of the Right state: the Left’s poem is most moving. The Right’s poem, the Gentlemen of the Left state, is fine.

Shunzei’s judgement: the Left’s poem has one counting to the end of the moon’s transits through the sky, while the Right has clouds parting from a mountain peak being the poet’s thoughts given form. Both poems are elegant in configuration and diction, but the Right’s ‘even the clouds’ (kumo ni dani) does not fit with the ending. The Left maintains its connections from beginning to end. Thus, I make it the winner.

Love I: 15

Left.

いかでもと思し妹が有樣は語る人までなつかしきかな

ikade mo to
omoishi imo ga
arisama wa
kataru hito made
natsukashiki kana
Somehow,
She has filled my thoughts, and
When she is described,
Even the one telling me
Seems more dear!

Lord Kanemune.

629.

Right.

雲間より聲を殘して歸る鳫聞かずはかゝる眺めせましや

kumoma yori
koe o nokoshite
kaeru kari
kikazu wa kakaru
nagamesemashi ya
From out the space between the clouds
Linger the cries
Of geese, homeward bound;
Had I not heard them,
I would not be so sunk in thought!

Lord Takanobu.

630

The Gentlemen of the Right state: the use of the diction of ‘description’ (arisama) in the Left’s poem is inappropriate for the style of the poem. The Gentlemen of the Left state: the Right’s poem is no more than a pedestrian poem on homeward-bound geese.

Shunzei’s judgement: The Left certainly does sound most mundane and unpoetic. As for the Right, while it seems like an evocative poem addressed to the topic of homeward-bound geese, is it not difficult for geese, or people, to leave behind their cries? In addition, it is unclear what sort of thoughts it is that occupy the poet. Both poems’ style lacks clarity. Thus, they are comparable and the round must tie.

Love I: 7

Left (Win).

洩らすなよ雲ゐる嶺の初時雨木の葉は下に色變るとも

morasunayo
kumoiru mine no
hatsu shigure
ko no ha wa shita ni
iro kawarutomo
O, let it not leak out!
Though the cloud-capped peaks’
First shower of rain,
On the leaves’ underside
Has left a change of hue

A Servant Girl.

613

Right.

閨のうちは涙の雨に朽ち果てゝしのぶは茂る妻にぞ有ける

neya no uchi wa
namida no ame ni
kuchihatete
shinobu wa shigeru
tsuma ni zo arikeru
Within my bedchamber
A rain of tears
Has rotted all, so
The weeping ferns secretly grow thick
Around the edges…

The Provisional Master of the Empress’ Household Office.

614

The Gentlemen of the Right state: the Left’s poem has no defects worth criticising. The Gentlemen of the Left state: the initial and final sections of the Right’s poem lack connection with each other. Does the poem have a conception of hiddenness?

Shunzei’s judgement: The conception and configuration of the Left’s ‘cloud-capped peaks’ first shower of rain’ (kumoiru mine no hatsu shigure) seems charming [kokoro sugata okashiku mie]. On that basis, it should win.

Winter II: 29

Left (Win).

これやこの三世の佛も諸人も名をあらはして明るしのゝめ

kore ya kono
miyo no hotoke mo
morobito mo
na o arawashite
akuru shinonome
Is it now that with
The three worlds’ Buddhas’ and
The many folks’
Names announced
Dawn touches the eastern sky?

Lord Kanemune.

597

Right.

冬深き在明の月の明け方に名乘りて出づる雲の上人

fuyu fukaki
ariake no tsuki no
akekata ni
nanorite izuru
kumo no uebito
In the depths of winter
When the moon to dawn
Brings brightness
They give their names and depart –
Those folk above the clouds…

Lord Takanobu.

598

The Gentlemen of the Right state: we find no faults in the Left’s poem. The Gentlemen of the Left state: the Buddhas’ names are recited at other times than the Ceremony of Reciting the Buddhas’ Names. In response: recitation of the names at around the twentieth day of the Twelfth Month is the Buddhas’ Names ceremony.

Shunzei’s judgement: that the Left’s poem has no faults, the Right have already said. Is the courtiers giving their names and leaving with the dawn reminiscent of the Buddhas’ names ceremony? It seems to be drawing on that old song, ‘when the dawntime moon brings brightness, announcing his name on leaving, is the cuckoo!’ The faultless poem wins.