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Daikōtaigōgū daijin kiyosuke-ason ke uta’awase 22

Round Twenty-Two

Snow

Left (Win)

霜がれのまがきの中に雪ふれば菊より後の花もありけり

shimogare no
magaki no naka ni
yuki fureba
kiku yori nochi no
hana mo arikeri
When, burned by frost,
Within my lattice fence
There is a fall of snow,
After the chrysanthemums,
There are flowers, even so.

Suketaka
43

Right

花さけば雪かとみせて雪ふれば花かとみするみよしのの山

hana sakeba
yuki ka to misete
yuki fureba
hana ka to misuru
miyoshino no yama
When the blossom blooms
I wonder if ‘tis snow, and
When the snow does fall
I wonder if ‘tis blossom
In the mountains of fair Yoshino.

Kūnin
44

Both are elegant, but even so the Right should lose.

Daikōtaigōgū daijin kiyosuke-ason ke uta’awase 06

Round Six

Left (Win)

梅の花をりてかざせば二月の雪は衣におつるなりけり

ume no hana
orite kazaseba
kisaragi  no
yuki wa koromo ni
otsuru narikeri
When plum blossom
I pluck and wear within my hair,
Second Month
Snows upon my robe
Do fall!

Masashige
11

Right

時ならぬ卯花ともやおもはましかきねの梅のかをらざりせば

toki naranu
u no hana tomo ya
omowamashi
kakine no ume no
ka orazariseba
Unseasonal
Deutzia blooms might
I think them?
Did the plum by my lattice fence
Fail to scent the air…

Atsuyori
12

The Left is not lacking in conception.

Daikōtaigōgū daijin kiyosuke-ason ke uta’awase 03

Plum

Round Three

Left (Tie)

あしがきのおくゆかしくもみゆるかな誰がすむ宿の梅の立えぞ

ashigaki no
oku yukashiku mo
miyuru kana
ta ga sumu yado no
ume no tachie zo
A fence of reeds and
Within, how charming
They appear!
Who is it dwells at this house of
Beckoning branches of plum?

Lord Kiyosuke
5

Right

ひばりあがる春の日ぐらし袖たれてかきねの梅の花みるわれは

hibari agaru
haru no higurashi
sode tarete
kakine no ume no
hana miru ware wa
Skylarks soar
In springtime all day long,
Dangling my sleeves, upon
The plum inside the lattice fence,
At the blossom gaze I…

Kenshō
6

The Left is in cliched style, while the final line of the Right is interrupted—a tie, I think.

SKKS V: 507

On the conception of chrysanthemums under the moon by a lattice fence, when she presented a hundred poem sequence.

霜をまつまがきの菊のよひの間におきまよふ色は山のはの月

shimo o matsu
magaki no kiku no
yoi no ma ni
okimayou iro wa
yama no ha no tsuki
Awaiting the frost
By my lattice fence, the chrysanthemums
In the midst of night
Are draped in puzzling hues
By the moon from off the mountains’ edge.

Kunaikyō

A kuzushiji version of the poem's text.
Created with Soan.

FGS XVI: 1738

From among his miscellaneous poems.

くれぬるかまがきの竹のむらすずめねぐらあらそふ声さわぐなり

kurenuru ka
magaki no take no
murasuzume
negura arasou
koe sawagunari
Is it dusk?
Along the bamboo of my lattice fence
A flock of sparrows
Quarrelling over roosts
Is chirping noisily, indeed!

The Jōmyōji Minister of the Left
浄妙寺左大臣

A kuzushiji version of the poem's text.
Created with Soan.

Sahyōe no suke sadafumi uta’awase 4

The Beginning of Summer

Left

ふるさとはこだかけれどもきみならぬほととぎすにもうとまれにけり

furusato wa
kodakakeredomo
kimi naranu
hototogisu ni mo
utomarenikeri
Around this ancient estate
The trees grow high, yet
Not by you alone,
By the cuckoo, too
Am I despised.

Tadamine
7

Right (Win)

やまがつのかきほにさけるうのはなはたがしろたへのころもかけしぞ

yamagatsu no
kakiho ni sakeru
u no hana wa
ta ga shirotae no
koromo kakeshi zo
Along the mountain man’s
Lattice fence bloom
Deutzia:
Whose white mulberry
Robes are hung there?

Mitsune
8

Autumn III: 15

Left.

今日といへばやがて籬の白菊ぞ尋し人の袖と見えける

kyō to ieba
yagate magaki no
shiragiku zo
tazuneshi hito no
sode to miekeru
On this day
At last, along my lattice fence
White chrysanthemums:
Seeming like the sleeves of
One who came to call…

Lord Kanemune.

449

Right.

さか月に浮べる今日の影よりやうつろひ初むる白菊の花

sakazuki ni
ukaberu kyō no
kage yori ya
uturoisomuru
shiragiku no hana
In my wine cup
Floating on this day:
Does the moonlight
Bring on changing hues
For white chrysanthemum blooms?

Ietaka.

450

The Right say that having the phrase ‘at last, along my lattice fence’ (yagate magaki no) continuing one from the other is ‘unsatisfactory’ [kokoroyukazu]. The Left say that the Right’s phrasing sounds as if the change in colour is brought about by the blossom floating in the wine cup, rather than the moonlight, and query if this is appropriate.

Shunzei’s judgement: Is the Left’s ‘at last, along my lattice fence’ that poor [ashiku ya wa]? Furthermore, the Right’s poem simply means ‘when floating in the wine cup’ the colours ‘change’. Neither poem has any conspicuous faults [tomo ni toganaku kikoyu]. The round should tie.