Cranes in a garden (庭上鶴馴)
Left
庭の面に人になれたるあしたづはよはひをきみにゆづるなるべし
niwa no omo ni hito ni naretaru ashitazu wa yowai o kimi ni yuzurunarubeshi Upon this garden’s face stands,
A Court Lady
Right
千とせふるやどのけしきやしるからん汀のたづのなれにけるかな
chitose furu yado no keshiki ya shirukaran migiwa no tazu no narenikeru kana Is it that a thousand years old
A Court Lady
Flutes 笛
波の音にたぐへてぞ聞く住の江の汀にて吹くこま笛の声
nami no oto The sound of waves
Kanemasa
Ponds 池
汀にはたちもよられぬ山がつのかげはづかしき清住のいけ
migiwa ni wa The water’s edge is
Akinaka
Topic unknown.
さ夜ふくるままに汀や凍るらむ遠ざかりゆく志がの浦波
sayo Fukuru
Is it while brief night
Kaikaku
Left (Tie).
wata no hara
Across the broad sea sweep,
Lord Ari’ie .
Right.
wata no hara
The broad sea sweep’s
Lord Tsune’ie .
The Right state: we are unable to appreciate the Left’s poem. The Left state: as are we the Right’s poem.
In judgement: the Left’s poem would seem to be an improved example of a poem in the style of the previous round. That being said, the waves wouldn’t not come, would they? And, what is the point in addressing them so? The Right’s poem has an extremely flippant final section. The poems are comparable and should tie.
In return.
沖つ波打出でむ事ぞつゝましき思ひよるべき汀ならねば
oki tu nami
Waves in the offing
The Mother of Lord Minamoto no Yori’ie
'Simply moving and elegant'