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Saishō chūjō kuninobu no ie no uta’awase 16

Left (Win).
我が恋は片裏染めの唐衣かへして寝るや色に見ゆるらむ

wa ga koFi Fa
kata’urazome  no
karakoromo
kaFesite nuru ya
iro ni miyurururamu
For my love
An inner-dyed
Cathay robe
I will reverse – in sleep, then,
I wonder will I see passion’s hues?

Shichirō 七郎
[Minamoto no Ie’yori 源家職]
31

Right.
寝ぬままに月を眺めて明かすかな闇には恋もなぐさかじかし

nenu mama ni
tuki wo nagamete
akasu kana
yami ni Fa koFi mo
nagusamazikasi
While sleepless
I gaze upon the moon
‘til dawn!
For in the darkness my love
Would gain no consolation!

Saburō 三郎
[Minamoto no Kanemasa 源兼昌]
32

Love V: 5

Left (Tie).
言はぬ間は思ふも心九十九髪さは僞りの夢や見てまし

iwanu ma wa
omou mo kokoro
tukumogami
sa wa itsuwari no
yume ya mitemashi
While he’s said not a word,
If love in his heart
Arrived for my white hair,
Then a false dream
Would I see in truth?

Lord Kanemune.
849

Right.
戀初めし心の色に積む年は我黒髪に現れにけり

koi someshi
kokoro no iro ni
tsumu toshi wa
wa ga kurogami ni
arawarenikeri
Since I first awoke to love
The hues of passion in my heart by
The drifting years
Upon my raven tresses
Are made clear.

Nobusada.
850

The Right state: is this a reference to the recent poem ‘seeing a dream with white hair’ (yume o miru to mo tsukumogami)? The Left state: ‘drifting years’ (tsumu toshi) is grating on the ear.

In judgement: both poems refer to hair, and the Gentlemen of the Right have asked whether the Left are referring to a ‘recent poem’, and I wonder when this poem might have been composed? It is impossible to entirely avoid referring to poems which are not included in the anthologies. Needless to say, though, it is normal for one’s poems not to resemble others to a great extent. In addition, I do not feel that ‘drifting years’ is that grating on the ear. However, simply saying ‘Upon my raven tresses are made clear’ (wa ga kurogami ni arawarenikeri) does not convey a strong sense of gray hair, I think. Finally, the configuration of the Left’s ‘then a false dream’ (sa wa itsuwari no) is particularly unacceptable, I think. So, a tie.