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Love VIII: 16

Left
玉章のたえだえになるたぐひかな雲井に雁の見えみ見えずみ

tamazusa no
taedae ni naru
tagui kana
kumoi ni kari no
miemi miezumi
His jewelled missives
Have become intermittent
It seems, just like
The geese up in the skies,
Glimpsed, and then not seen at all…

Lord Ari’ie
1051

Right (Win)
思かぬる夜はの袂に風ふけて涙の河に千鳥鳴くなり

omoikanuru
yowa no tamoto ni
kaze fukete
namida no kawa ni
chidori nakunari
Unable to bear my love,
At midnight my sleeve is
Stirred by the wind, and
Upon a river of tears
The plovers are crying…

Nobusada
1052

The Gentlemen of the Right state: we find no faults to mention in the Left’s poem. The Gentlemen of the Left state: we wonder about the reason for emphasising ‘upon a river of tears the plovers’ (namida no kawa ni chidori).

In judgement: the Left on a lover’s letters becoming intermittent, and saying ‘the geese up in the skies, glimpsed, and then not seen at all’ (kumoi ni kari no miemi miezumi) has a charming conception, and elegant diction. The Right, saying ‘at midnight my sleeve is stirred by the wind’ (yowa no tamoto ni kaze fukete) and continuing ‘the plovers are crying’ (chidori nakunari) has a configuration and diction which sounds fine, too. The criticisms of the Gentlemen of the Left are nothing more than ‘a fisherman fishing beneath his pillow’! Although the conception of the Left’s poem is charming, the configuration of the Right’s poem is slightly more notable, so it should win.

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Left (Tie).

ことゝへよ思ひおきつの濱千鳥なくなくいでし跡の月影

koto toeyo
omoi okitsu no
hama chidori
nakunaku ideshi
ato no tsukikage
Ask after
Fond remembrances, Okitsu
Beach-bound plovers,
Crying, calling did I depart,
Merely moonlight remaining…

173

Right (Tie).

關の戸をさそひし人は出でやらで有明の月のさやの中山

seki no to o
sasoishi hito wa
ideyarade
ariake no tsuki no
saya no nakayama
To the barrier-gate
Did he invite me, yet
Left it not;
The dawnbreak moon upon
The mountain ‘tween brief nights.

174

Winter 45

Left.

旅寢する夢路はたえぬ須磨の關通ふちどりの暁の聲

tabinesuru
yumeji wa taenu
suma no seki
kayou chidori no
akatsuki no koe
Asleep on my travels,
My path of dreams has ceased, at
The lonely barrier of Suma;
Returning from their roosts, plovers
Cries fill the dawn.

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Right (Win)

なくちどり袖の凑を訪ひこかし唐舟もよるの寢ざめに

naku chidori
sode no minato wo
toikokashi
morokoshibune mo
yoru no nezame ni
Plovers, with your cries,
To the river-mouth of my sleeve
Come calling!
A ship from far Cathay
Starts me from night-time sleep…

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