Round Ten
Left
をぐらやま下ゆく水のさざれ石も数かくれなくてらす月かげ
ogurayama shita yuku mizu no sazare’ishi mo kazu kakurenaku terasu tsukikage Beneath gloomy Mount Ogura
Lord Kiyosuke
Right (Win)
あまの川とわたる月の影すみてにごれるよともみえぬ空かな
ama no kawa towataru tsuki no kage sumite nigoreru yo tomo mienu sora kana Across the River of Heaven’s
Shinkaku
There’s nothing to mention about the Left, and the same is the case for the Right, but for some reason should it win?
Topic unknown.
浦ちかく波のうちよるさざれ石のなかの思ひとしるやしらずや
ura chikaku nami uchiyoru sazare’ishi no naka no omoi to shiru ya shirazu ya Close by the shore
Ise
Stones 石
いかにして水の下なるさざれ石のなかのおもひのきえせざるらん
ika ni shite mizu no shita naru sazare’ishi no naka no omoi no kiezaruran O, what am I to do?
Daishin
Left (Tie).
kumoi made
Beyond the clouds
Lord Suetsune .
Right.
ise no umi no
The sea at Ise:
Ietaka .
The Right state: the Left’s poem is clichéd. The Left state: the Right’s poem is that of Shigeyuki.
In judgement: the Left’s poem is clichéd, but in addition to this uses ‘goes on and on’ (tsuzukite ), which is not something one should say. The Right’s poem is, indeed, overly close to Shigeyuki’s, so both Left and Right poem are deficient and lacking in any element allowing a win.
'Simply moving and elegant'
