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Spring I: 12

Left (Win).

空はなを霞もやらず風冴えて雪氣にくもる春の夜の月

sora wa nao
kasumi mo yarazu
kaze saete
yukige ni kumoru
haru no yo no tsuki
The skies are still
Untouched by haze;
The wind clearly brings
A sense of snow to cloud
The moon, this springtime night.

A Servant Girl

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Right.

梅が枝の匂ばかりや春ならんなを雪深し窓のあけぼの

ume ga e no
nioi bakari ya
haru naran
nao yuki fukashi
mado no akebono
Is a branch of plum’s
Scent alone
Spring?
Still the snows lie deep
Outside my window this dawn.

Jakuren

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Neither team has any criticisms to make of the other’s poem in this round.

Shunzei comments that both poems are simply and beautifully constructed in both form and phrasing, and the final two lines of both poems are equally charming. He feels, though, that the beginning of the Right’s poem would have been improved if, instead of ‘a branch of plum’ (ume ga e), which focuses the audience’s attention on the branch, and not the blossom, it had begun ‘Is the plum beneath my eaves’ (noki no ume), instead. In addition, while reluctant to discount ‘outside my window this dawn’ (mado no akebono), he cannot help but feel that ‘the moon, this springtime night’ (haru no yo no tsuki) is a more superlative conclusion, and so has to award victory to the Left.

Spring 4

Left.

花の香のかすめる月にあくがれて夢もさだかに見えぬ比かな

hana no ka no
kasumeru tsuki ni
akugarete
yume mo sadaka ni
mienu
koro kana
The blossoms’ scent
Befogs the moon;
Thus lost,
Certain it is that dreams
Will not come now, perhaps…

7

Right (Win)

春の夜は月の桂もにほふ覧光に梅の色はまがひぬ

haru no yo wa
tsuki no katsura mo
niouran
hikari ni ume no
iro wa magainu
On a night in springtime
The moon’s silver trees, too,
Must give out their fragrance;
In such light the plums’
Hues can be mistaken.

8

Spring 3

Left (Tie)

うちわたす遠方人はこたえねどにほひぞなのる野べの梅が枝

uchiwatasu
ochikatabito wa

kotaenedo
nioi zo nanoru
nobe no ume ga e
A far, far,
Distant soul
Makes no reply, yet
A fragrance styles
A sprig of plum upon the plain.

Right

5

飛鳥河遠き梅が枝にほふ夜はいたづらにやは春風の吹

asukagawa
tōki ume ga e
niou yo wa
itzura ni ya wa
harukaze no fuku
By the Asuka River,
From afar a spray of plum
Scents the night;
Pointlessly
Does the spring wind blow?

6

Spring 2

Left (Win)

おほぞらは梅のにほひに霞つゝくもりもはてぬ春の夜の月

ōzora wa
ume no nioi ni
kasumitsutsu
kumori mo hatenu
haru no yo
no tsuki
The heavens with
The scent of plum
Are hazed;
Not with cloud is covered
This spring night’s moon.

3

Right

こゝろあてにわくともわかじ梅の花散かふ里の春の淡雪

kokoroate ni
waku tomo wakaji
ume no hana
chirikau sato no
haru no awayuki
A guess
Could not tell between
The plum blossom
Scattered round my dwelling and
Spring snow spume.

4

Spring 1

In the Second Month of the Fourth Year of Kenpô (1216), I selected and ordered two hundred of my own meagre works. In the Sixth Month of the following year, I took the order apart and rearranged it somewhat. In the Seventh Year of Kenpô, I secretly presented it to His Majesty, and received an Imperial judgement upon it.

Left (Tie)

春日野にさくや梅が枝雪まより今は春べと若菜つみつゝ

kasugano ni
saku ya ume ga e
yukima yori
ima wa harube to
wakana tsumitsutsu
On Kasuga field,
O, branches of blooming plum blossom!
From the spaces in the snow,
‘Now Spring is come!’
Do we pluck fresh greens.

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Right

消なくに又やみ山をうづむらん若菜つむ野も淡雪ぞ降

kienakuni
mata ya miyama o
uzumuran
wakana tsumu no mo
awayuki zo furu
Has it not gone, and yet
The mountains’ depths
Does bury?
Upon the fresh-green picking fields
A spume of snow falls on…

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