Cranes in a garden (庭上鶴馴)
Left
庭の面に人になれたるあしたづはよはひをきみにゆづるなるべし
niwa no omo ni hito ni naretaru ashitazu wa yowai o kimi ni yuzurunarubeshi Upon this garden’s face stands,
A Court Lady
Right
千とせふるやどのけしきやしるからん汀のたづのなれにけるかな
chitose furu yado no keshiki ya shirukaran migiwa no tazu no narenikeru kana Is it that a thousand years old
A Court Lady
Pine seedlings on the Day of the Rat (子日小松)
Left
ねの日する松の葉ごとにかぞふれば猶ぞつきせぬきみが千とせは
ne no hi suru matsu no ha goto ni kazoureba nao zo tsukisenu kimi ga chitose wa On this Day of the Rat
A Court Lady
Right
はるかなる君がよはひにくらべむと子日の松をけふは引くかな
harukanaru kimi ga yowai ni kurabemu to ne no hi no matsu o kyō wa hiku kana Distant is
A Court Lady
Felicitations 賀
つきもせぬ君がよはひはいくちよとかぎれる竹の枝にやあるらん
tsuki mo senu Inexhaustible is
Daishin
Felicitations 賀
我が君のよはひたけたるうれしさは大宮人の身にあまるらん
wa ga kimi no My Lord’s
Kanemasa
菊の水齢を延べずあらませばさとも荒さで今日あはましや
kiku no midu
The chrysanthemums’ waters
15
濡れ衣と人にいはすな菊の花齢延ぶとぞ我そぼちつる
nureginu to
That you have no effect –
限りなく君が齢を延へつつ名だたる宿の露とならなむ
kagirinaku
Limitless
Ise
Left (Tie).
toshi o hete
If the years go by, and
Lord Suetsune .
Right.
kurabekoshi
We did match
Nobusada .
The Right state: the conception of youth is lacking. The Left state: the initial part simply resembles the original poem.
In judgement: the Left’s poem, from beginning to end, uses nothing but commonplace diction. The Right’s poem, too, really says nothing beyond the sense of its origin poem. The poems are of the same quality.
'Simply moving and elegant'