Left
秋のせみさむき声にぞきこゆなる木のはの衣を風やぬぎつる
aki no semi samuki koe ni zo kikoyunaru ko no ha no kinu o kaze ya nugitsuru In the autumn, the cicadas’
112[1]
Right
あきの夜の月の影こそ木の間よりおちてはきぬとみえわたりけれ
aki no yo no tsuki no kage koso ko no ma yori ochite wa kinu to miewatarikere On an autumn nightDoes come a’falling Everywhere, it seems.
113
[1] Shinsen man’yōshū 109/Fubokushō XIII: 5422
Left
秋のよのあまてる月の光にはおく白露を玉とこそ見れ
aki no yo no ama teru tsuki no hikari ni wa oku shiratsuyu o tama to koso mire On an autumn night
98[1]
Right
あきののにおける露をばひとりぬる我が涙とも思ひしれかし
aki no no ni okeru tsuyu oba hitori nuru wa ga namida to mo omoishire kashi Upon the autumn fields
99
[1] Shinchokusenshū V: 281/Shinsen man’yōshū 95
Left
あき風にほころびぬらむ藤ばかまつづりさせてふきりぎりす鳴く
akikaze ni hokorobinuramu fujibakama tsuzurisase chō kirigirisu naku The autumn wind
Ariwara no Muneyana
Right
秋の夜のあめときこえて降りつるは風に散りつる紅葉なりけり
aki no yo no ame to kikoete furitsuru wa kaze ni chiritsuru momiji narikeri On an autumn night
95
風寒みはだれ霜降る秋の夜は山下とよみ鹿ぞ鳴くなる
kaze samumi
How chill the wind
Fujiwara no Mototoshi
This poem is also included in the Horikawa Hyakushū .
Left (Tie).
秋の夜に幾度ばかり照らむ稲葉の露に宿る稲妻
aki no yo ni
On an autumn night
Lord Kanemune .
329
Right (Tie).
山の端に殘れる雲の絶え間より鳥羽田の面に通ふ稲妻
yama no ha ni
On the mountains’ edge
Nobusada .
330
The Right state that they find the Left’s poem ‘commonplace’ [mezurashikarazu], while the Left remark that the Right’s poem ‘ has no faults, but we wonder about the utility of “Tobata”?’
Shunzei’s judgment: While the Left’s poem recalls the verse ‘How many times have I awakened ’ (ikutabi bakari nezameshite ), in form, I certainly feel it is good [utazama, yoroshiku koso haberumere]. As for the Right’s poem, though there is no particular wording which calls for the use of ‘Tobata’, as a large paddy field which is close to the capital, it does not seem that there is a reason not to use it. Thus, this round is a tie.
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