Listening to a flute in a village.
おきゐつつねざめのみするころにしもよぶかきふえのこゑをきくかな
oki’itsutsu Ever and always on arising and
Minamoto no Michinari (?-1019)
Next Door 隣
中がきにおふる草木のはをしげみ夏ぞとなりはうとく成りける
nakagaki ni The fence between is
Daishin
Next Door 隣
もろともにまぢかきほどにすまひしていざ垣ごしに物語せん
morotomo ni Together
Higo
Next Door 隣
かきごしにほのめくだにもあるものをねたくも梅のあるじなるかな
kakigoshi ni Through a gap in the fence
Toshiyori
Shrines 社
神がきやみむろの山の木がくれにも見えまがはぬはあけの玉がき
kamigaki ya O, sacred wall!
Tadafusa
Ancient Estates 故郷
さしながらまだをののえはくちなくにまがきもねやもあらぬ里かな
sashinagara Not entirely
Nakazane
薄霧のまかき籬の花の朝じめり秋は夕べと誰か言ひけむ
usugiri no
Faintly misted
Fujiwara no Kiyosuke
Left (Tie).
namida seku
Tears are dammed upon
Lord Sada’ie
Right.
ume ga e no
The plum branches’
Jakuren
Both teams state there are no faults with their opponent’s poem.
In judgement: the Gentlemen of both Left and Right have stated that there are no faults with the style of either poem. I accept that and will make this round a tie.
Composed on a fence, covered with deutzia blooms.
いづれをか分きて問はまし山里の垣根続きに咲ける卯の花
idure wo ka
Where
Ōe no Motofusa
Left.
朝まだき庭も籬も野分して露をきあがる草の葉もなし
asa madaki
At the cusp of dawn
Lord Ari’ie .
359
Right.
夕間暮むら雲迷ひ吹風に枕定めぬ花の色いろ
yūmagure
In the dim dusk light
Lord Takanobu .
360
The Right state that ‘linking “gales” with “drenched” is a poor expression’, while the Left feel that they have no criticisms of the Right’s poem.
Shunzei, again, broadly agrees: ‘What are we to make of the Left’s poem with a fence left standing in a garden after a gale? The Right’s “crowding clouds confusedly” is fine, indeed. Although the term “pillow” is unsuitable in this context, the Left’s “drenched in dew” cannot possibly be right here, either, and so the Right wins.”
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