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SKKS XVIII: 1723

Composed when he was far from courtier’s hall.

あまつ風ふけひの浦にゐるたづのなどか雲井にかへらざるべき

ama tsu kaze
fukei no ura ni
iru tazu no
nado ka kumoi ni
kaerazarubeki
Heaven’s breezes
Blow upon the shore at Fukei, where
Rests a crane:
Why, beyond the clouds,
May he not return?

Fujiwara no Kiyotada
藤原清正[1]


[1] Fujiwara no Kiyotada 藤原清正 (?-953): one of the Thirty-Six Poetic Immortals and a minor courtier. As well as being included in Shinkokinshū, this poem is also listed in Wakan rōeishū (II: 453), Kiyotada’s personal collection, Kiyotada-shū (89) and also the personal collection of Fujiwara no Tadami 藤原忠見, Tadami-shū (143). While Wakan rōeishū simply gives the topic of the poem as ‘Cranes’, the personal collections provide more information. Tadami states that the poem was ‘Sent to the Shōni Palace Lady to present in his place when he was of about the age to be admitted to the Courtier’s Hall and had become Governor of Kii’ making the waka a plea for further advancement at court. Kiyotada himself simply says ‘When I had become Governor of Kii and had not yet been permitted to enter the Courtier’s Hall.’ Tanaka and Akase (1992, 502)  note that Kiyotada was appointed Governor of Kii while still a Chamberlain at Sixth Rank, when this was usually a post held by someone of Junior Fifth Rank, Lower Grade, the lowest rank at which a man would be permitted to enter the Courtier’s Hall (tenjō no ma 殿上間) and have direct contact with the emperor. The poem is, thus, simultaneously, an expression of gratitude for imperial favour (the ‘heavenly wind’) to him (‘the crane’) which has made him Governor of Ki – the province where Fukei is located, and a plea that he be allowed above ‘the clouds’ (into the Courtier’s Hall), which is subtly laced with resentment (‘Why haven’t I had the promotion in rank which this post would normally bring?’)!

Zōki-hōshi shū 5

I stayed by the beach at Fukiage. The moon was fair in the extreme, and the beach was a place where it was said that heavenly beings would often descend to and make merry. Truly, it was a fair place, indeed! That night, the sky was heart-rendingly moving, and as the night wore on, the breeze, brushing fallen frost from the ducks’ wing-feathers, brought loneliness to the skies, while the distant cries of cranes, calling for their comrades, was so moving, my words fail to express it. Birds other than these flocked, calling from the sandbars and even my insensitive and unfeeling self was moved beyond measure.

をとめごが天の羽衣ひきつれてむべもふけ井の浦におるらん

otomego ga
ama no hagoromo
hikitsurete
mube mo fukehi no
ura ni oruran
Heaven’s maidens’
Feathered robes,
Drawn up by
The gusts at Fukehi
Beach when they rest there.

Sumiyoshi-sha uta’awase kaō ni-nen 24

Left

あまくだるかみもひさしくみやゐして月ものどかにすみよしのうら

amakudaru
kami mo hisashiku
miya’ishite
tsuki mo nodoka ni
sumiyoshi no ura
Descending from Heaven,
The Deity, too, eternally
Manifests here, where
The moon, too, is calm
Above the bay of Sumiyoshi.

Venerable Dharma Eye Shōken[1]
47

Right (Win)

かみよよりたぐひなしともすみよしのまつやこよひの月をみるらむ

kamiyo yori
taguinashi tomo
sumiyoshi no
matsu ya koyoi no
tsuki o miruramu
Since the Age of Gods
Is there nothing to compare with,
At Sumiyoshi,
The pines tonight with
The moon filling my gaze?

Novice Jakuchō[2]
48

The Left appears to have a truly charming conception and configuration, but beginning with ‘The Deity, too, eternally’ and then saying ‘The moon, too, is calm’ and repeating the same word is discordant. The Right, in addition to having no particular faults to mention, has an extremely pleasant-sounding configuration with ‘The pines tonight’. Thus, I make this a win for the Right.


[1] Hōgen kashōi Shōkaku 法眼和尚位静賢

[2] Shami Jakuchō沙弥寂超

Sumiyoshi-sha uta’awase kaō ni-nen 13

Round Thirteen

Left

すみよしのあまくだりますまつのうへにそらよりかくる月のしらゆふ

sumiyoshi no
amakudarimasu
matsu no ue ni
sora yori kakuru
tsuki no shirayū
At Sumiyoshi
Did the Deity descend from Heaven
To the pines—upon them
From the skies are hung
The moon’s sacred streamers.

Kamo no Agatanushi Masahira
Kataoka Junior Assistant Priest[1]
25

Right (Win)

しめのうちにしらゆふかけぬひまぞなき月もたむけのこころありけり

shime no uchi ni
shirayū kakenu
hima zo naki
tsuki mo tamuke no
kokoro arikeri
Within the holy precints
Sacred streamers fail to hang
In not a single spot—
The moon to make an offering
Is of a mind.

Lord Fujiwara no Chikashige
Junior Fifth Rank, Upper Grade,
Without Office[2]
26

While the poem of the Left’s ‘From the skies are hung’ and so forth seems charming, I do wonder about the idea of the ‘Deity descending from Heaven / To the pines’—it’s vague. The poem of the Right’s conception and configuration of ‘The moon to make an offering’ appears pleasant, and thus it wins.


[1] Kataoka negi jūyon’ijō Kamo agatanushi Masahira 片岡禰宜従四位上賀茂県主政平

[2] San’i jūgoijō Fujiwara ason Chikashige 散位従五位上藤原朝臣親重