A poem from the Poetry Contest held by the Empress Dowager during the Reign of the Kanpyō Emperor.
住の江のきしによる波夜さへや夢のかよひ路人めよくらむ
| suminoe no kisi ni yoru nami yoru saFe ya yume no kayoFidi Fitome yokuramu | On Suminoe’s Shore break waves; Even at night Upon the path of dreams Can we avoid others’ prying eyes? |
Lord Fujiwara no Toshiyuki
Left
住吉のきしによる波夜さへや夢のかよひ路人めよくらむ
| sumiyoshi no kishi ni yoru nami yoru sae ya yume no kayoiji hitome yokuramu | On Sumiyoshi’s Shore break waves; Even at night Upon the path of dreams Can we avoid others’ prying eyes? |
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Right
夕附夜おぼろに人を見てしより天雲はれぬ心地こそすれ
| yūzukuyo oboro ni hito o miteshi yori amagumo harenu kokochi koso sure | On a moonlit evening Faintly, a lady Did I see, and ever since Heaven’s clouds, unclearing, Weigh on my feelings… |
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Left (Tie).
君がりと浮きぬる心まよふらん雲はいくへぞ空の通ひ路
| kimigari to ukinuru kokoro mayouran kumo wa iku e zo sora no kayoiji |
To your home Drifts my heart In seeming confusion; How may layers must the clouds Pass though on the heavenly paths? |
A Servant Girl.
923
Right.
思やるながめも今は絶えぬとや心をうづむ夕暮の雲
| omoiyaru nagame mo ima wa taenu to ya kokoro o uzumu yūgure no sora |
Lost in thought I gazed at you, but now Is it that it’s done that Buries my heart beneath The evening skies? |
Ietaka.
924
The Right state: we would have preferred it to have been ‘is it that my heart drifts?’ (ukinuru kokoro ya). The Left state: the Right’s poem lacks faults.
In judgement: the final sections of both poems seem fine. For strict correctness, the Left should have had ‘my drifting heart does seem confused’ (ukinuru kokoro wa mayourashi), but because this would not fit with the poem, he has left it as ‘in seeming confusion’ (mayouran). The poem is fine as it is, without introducing ‘is it that my heart’ (kokoro ya). I don’t know what to make of the expression ‘to your home’ (kimigari), but ‘how may layers must the clouds pass though on the heavenly paths?’ (kumo wa iku e zo sora no kayoiji) is charming. Then again, the Right’s ‘buries my heart beneath the evening skies?’ (kokoro o uzumu yūgure no sora) has a gentle beauty about it. Thus, the round should tie.
Left.
寢覺まで猶苦しき行歸り足も休めぬ夢の通ひ路
| nezame made nao kurushiki yukikaeri ashi mo yasumenu yume no kayoiji |
Until I awaken It is ever painful Going back and forth My feet not resting once Upon the path of dreams. |
Lord Ari’ie.
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Right.
忘らるゝ身をば思はで龍田山心にかゝる沖つ白波
| wasuraruru mi o ba omowade tatsuta yama kokoro ni kakaru oki tsu shiranami |
Forgotten I think not on myself, but On Mount Tatsuta Dwells my heart Whipped by whitecaps… |
Jakuren.
838
The Gentlemen of the Right: no faults to mention. The Gentlemen of the Left state: the Right’s poem does not have anything to say beyond what is contained in its origin poem.
In judgement: the Left’s poem takes the conception of Komachi’s poem ‘my feet don’t rest, constantly trailing to you, yet’ (ashi mo yasumezu kayoedomo) and skilfully adds ‘Until I awaken it is ever painful’ (nezame made nao kurushiki). The Right’s poem is based upon the poem ‘where, through night’s depths, my Lord’ (yowa ni ya kimi ga), but then says ‘Dwells my heart whipped by whitecaps’ (kokoro ni kakaru oki tsu shiranami), which sounds pleasant, too. They are comparable and should tie.