Left
恋しきに侘びてたましひまどひなば空しきからの名にやのこらむ
koishiki ni wabite tamashii madoinaba munashiki kara no na ni ya nokoramu If, for love of you and
190[1]
Right
あかずして今朝のかへりぢおもほえず心をひとつおきてこしかば
akazushite kesa no kaeriji omohoezu kokoro o hitotsu okitekoshikaba Still hungering for you
191
[1] Kokinshū XII: 571/Shinsen man’yōshū 219/Kokin rokujō IV: 1983
New Year’s Day
冬の夜を旅の空にてあかしてや都に春の今朝は来るらむ
fuyu no yo o A winter’s night
Kanemasa
Cicadas (蟬)
東路や今朝たちくればせみの声たかしの山にいまぞ鳴くなる
azumaji ya Upon the Eastern roads
Nakazane
桜にも枝さしかはす桃なれば空さへ今朝はさかやもひせり
sakura ni mo
When even the cherry
Minamoto no Shunrai
誰も皆今朝は桜をうちすてて桃をたづねて過ぐすなりけり
tare mo mina
Every single one
Minamoto no Shunrai
Left.
kaeritsuru
Having come home
Lord Kanemune .
Right.
onozukara
While I
Jakuren .
The Right state: we find no particular faults to mention. The Left state: we wonder about the appropriateness of placing one’s trust in dreams during the daytime. Was he having a nap?
In judgement: the conception of the Left’s poem is well developed from beginning to end. The Right’s poem has an elegant configuration, but it is unacceptable to have the speaker napping. However, the Left’s ‘Why is it that’ (ika ni ko wa ) is unsatisfactory style. I have to say the poems are equal and tie.
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