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Round Twenty-Nine

Left (Win)

君やあらぬ我が身やあらぬおぼつかなたのめしことのみなかはりぬる

kimi ya aranu
wa ga mi ya aranu
obotsukana
tanomeshi koto no
mina kawarinuru
Aren’t you who you once were?
Aren’t I who I was then?
How strange that
All we trusted in
Has changed.

Shun’e
57

Right

恋ひしなん命ぞをしきつれもなき人にしも身をかへんねたさに

koishinan
inochi zo oshiki
tsure mo naki
hito ni shimo mi o
kaen netasa ni
That I would die of love
Makes me regret my life!
But for that cruel
Girl should I
Exchange myself—exasperating!

Yorisuke

58

I feel the left is old-fashioned, isn’t it? And yet, it is not without feeling. The Right does not have a poor conception, but its diction is insufficient.

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Round Twenty-Seven

Left

我が恋はすさの入江のこもり江のおもひこめても年をふるかな

wa ga koi wa
susa no irie no
komorie no
omoikomete mo
toshi o furu kana
My love is as
Susa Inlet’s
Hidden creeks:
Ever filling my thoughts
As the years pass by!

Masashige
53

Right (Win)

わが恋はおとなし河の浪なれやおもひかくれどきく人もなし

wa ga koi wa
otonashigawa no
nami nare ya
omoikakuredo
kiku hito mo nashi
Is my love
As the River Silent’s
Waves?
Passion fills me, yet
She never listens at all…

Atsuyori
54

The Right’s conception and diction are suitable and the overall impression is not bad at all.

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Round Twenty-Six

Left

恋ひしなんいのちを誰にゆづりおきてつれなき人のはてをみせまし

koishinan
inochi o tare ni
yuzuri’okite
tsurenaki hito no
hate o misemashi
Likely dying of love,
My life, to whom should I
Consign?
That cruel girl’s
Ending—would that show it to her?

Shun’e

51

Right (Win)

つれもなき人はおもひもすてられでうき身のみこそなげまほしけれ

tsure mo naki
hito wa omoi mo
suterarede
ukimi no mi koso
nagemahoshikere
So cruel is
That girl, but my passion for her
I cannot abandon;
It is my pitiful self that
I would wish to throw away!

Kenshō

52

The Left isn’t bad, but it’s a bit cliched. As for the Right, having both ‘abandon’ and ‘throw away’ could be a fault and yet the conception of one ‘abandoning passion’ is different. Whichever way you look at it, it wins.

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Round Twenty-Five

Left

恋ひしなん後は煙とのぼりなばたなびく雲をそれとだにみよ

koishinan
nochi wa keburi to
noborinaba
tanabiku kumo o
sore to dani miyo
I shall die of love for you, and
After as smoke
Shall rise, then
The trailing clouds
Behold and think of me!

Iemoto
49

Right

我が身だに思ふにたがふ物なればことわりなりや人のつらきは

wa ga mi dani
omou ni tagau
mono nareba
kotowarinari ya
hito no tsuraki wa
My sorry self
Differs from what I had thought
So I suppose
It’s natural, isn’t it—
That she should be so cruel…

Moromitsu
50

The Right made me feel that’s how it is. It’s charming.

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Round Twenty-Four

Love

Left (Win)

恋しさのなぐさむ方やなからましつらき心をおもひませずは

koishisa no
nagusamu kata ya
nakaramashi
tsuraki kokoro o
omoimasezu wa
I wish my love for you
My consolation
Would be not—for then
Of your cold heart
I would not have to think…

Lord Kiyosuke
47

Right

君こずはうちへもいらじはらひつるねやのおもはむ事もはづかし

kimi kozu wa
uchi e mo iraji
haraitsuru
neya no omowamu
koto wa hazukashi
You have not come, so
I’ll not enter in—
Swept clean,
Thinking of my bedchamber
Is embarrassing, indeed!

Shun’e
48

Both are elegant, yet what comes after ‘within’ is not something which one would really feel, so I would say the Right loses.

SZS XIV: 852

Composed on the conception of love which fails to linger, when he composed ten love poems at the same residence.

たちかへる人をもなにかうらみまし恋しさをだにとどめざりせば

tatikaFeru
Fito wo mo nani ka
uramimasi
koFisisa wo dani
todomezariseba
If he rises to return
Why should he
Be the object of my despite?
If even his love
He does not leave behind…

Supernumerary Middle Counsellor Morotoki