When he had gone to Saga to dig up plants for his garden.
日暮しに見れ共あかぬ女郎花のべにや今宵旅ねしなまし
| higurasi ni miredomo akanu wominaFesi nobe ni ya koyoFi tabinesinamasi |
At the sunset I see, yet cannot get my fill Of maidenflowers, so In the fields tonight Should I make a traveller’s bed? |
Fujiwara no Nagayoshi
藤原長能
Left (Win).
あらましに心は盡きぬ今夜とて待たばと思ふ夕暮の空
| aramashi ni kokoro wa tsukinu koyoi tote mataba to omou yūgure no sora |
Wondering if it will it be Has been the sole focus of my thoughts; Tonight, he said – ‘If only you could wait,’ so thinks The evening sky… |
Lord Ari’ie.
821
Right.
心さへかきくらすかなつくづくと思ひ入り日の空を眺めて
| kokoro sae kakikurasu kana tsukuzuku to omoi irihi no sora o nagamete |
My very heart Is sunk in darkness; On and on, Go my thoughts with the setting sun, Gazing at the sky… |
Lord Tsune’ie.
822
The Right state: we find no faults. The Left state: saying ‘on and on’ (tsukuzuku) seems somewhat weak.
In judgement: the final line of the Left’s poem sounds elegant. Again, I make the Left the winner.