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Love IV: 19

Left (Win).
つれなくて今日も過ぬと思には暮るゝ空さへ恨めしき哉

tsurenakute
kyō mo suginu to
omou ni wa
kururu sora sae
urameshiki kana
Heartlessly
Has she spent today,
I think, and
Evening the darkening sky
Do I despise!

Lord Suetsune.
817

Right.
あやにくに物ぞ悲しき待ちし日は曇る空さへ嬉しかりしを

ayaniku ni
mono zo kanashiki
machishi hi wa
kumoru sora sae
ureshikarishi o
Unexpectedly,
All is sadness;
All day I waited, and
The very clouding of the sky
Was a joy, but…

Lord Takanobu.
818

The Right: we find no faults to mention. The Left state: ‘The very clouding’ (kumoru sae koso) does not sound like a reference to the evening.

In judgement: in the Right’s poem, as it begins with  ‘unexpectedly’ (ayaniku ni), it then becomes unnecessary to mention clouding. The Left’s poem is pleasant. It should win.