Round Twenty-One

Left (Win)

小倉山木木のもみぢのくれなゐはみねの嵐のおろすなりけり

ogurayama kigi no momiji no kurenai wa mine no arashi no orosu narikeri

On gloomy Mount Ogura The leaves upon the trees, So scarlet, By the storm wind from the peak Are tossed down.

Lord Kiyosuke
41

Right

ふかくあさきもみぢばながるあすか河ふちせは色にあらはれにけり

fukaku asaki momijiba nagaru asukagawa fuchise wa iro ni arawarenikeri

Across both depths and shallows Flow the scarlet leaves On the Asuka river, Among the rapids and the pools Have they appeared.

Shun’e
42

Neither of these is bad. The Right violates the five syllable pattern; the Left has no faults.