Left (Win).
袖の波胸の煙は誰も見よ君が憂き名の立つぞ悲しき
| sode no nami mune no kemuri wa tare mo miyo kimi ga ukina no tatsu zo kanashiki |
The waves upon my sleeves, and The smoke rising from my breast – Let all see them! But should you, my love, be called heartless, That would make me sad… |
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Right.
うとからぬ人こそ今は恨みけれ忍びしほどの心強さを
| utokaranu hito koso ima wa uramikere shinobishi hodo no kokorozuyosa o |
My family and friends Now I do Despise: For when our love was hidden, They were all so cold… |
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The Right state: the Left’s poem has no faults to indicate. The Left state: by prioritising the emotions of the relatives, the poem does not clearly express the conception of Love.
In judgement: the initial section of the Left’s poem sounds fine, but the final ‘would make me sad’ (kanashiki) is going too far. The Gentlemen of the Left have accurately described the faults of the Right’s poem, but beyond that there is nothing praiseworthy in the poem’s style, either. Thus I make the Left the winner.