Round Six

Left

しほ風の雲吹きはらふ秋のよは月すみわたる天のはしだて

shiokaze no kumo fukiharau aki no yo wa tsuki sumiwataru ama no hashidate

The tidewinds Blow away the clouds On an autumn night The moon crossing clear above Ama-no-hashidate…

Tamechika
59

Right (Win)

あかざりし花にたとへてながむれば月は心ぞすみまさりける

akazarishi hana ni tatoete nagamureba tsuki wa kokoro zo sumimasarikeru

A never sating Blossom do I imagine it, When gazing at The moon, my heart is Most wonderfully clear.

Lord Yorimasa
60

The Left: it is not possible to determine where the wind is blowing, yet saying ‘the tidewinds blow the clouds away’ conveys a different impression. The Right’s use of ‘imagine’ is unsatisfactory as a piece of diction, but this is not a significant fault, so it should win, I think.