Left (Win).

夕風の眞野の萩原吹くまゝに閨荒れぬとや鶉鳴らん

yūkaze no mano no hagiwara fuku mama ni neya arenu to ya uzura nakuran

As the evening breeze across Mano’s bush clover meadow Does blow, Their roost disturbed, perhaps, Quail burst into cry.

Lord Suetsune.

341

Right.

風の音花の色にもしるかりつ鶉鳴べき野邊の氣色は

kaze no oto hana no iro ni mo shirukaritsu uzura nakubeki nobe no keshiki wa

The sound of wind, and The grasses’ hues Do tell it: ‘Tis fit that quails cry Upon a scene of plains.

Lord Takanobu.

342

The Right have no criticisms to make of the Left’s poem. The Left simply remark that having both iro and keshiki (which use the character 色) is ‘a fault’.

Shunzei’s judgement is that, ‘the Left’s “does blow” (fuku mama ni), followed by “their roost disturbed, perhaps” (neya arenu to ya) is not a particularly expression. The Right’s, “do tell it” (shirukaritsu) is somewhat old-fashioned; I would not regard it as a fault, but I do regret it. Thus, the “roost” should win.’