Left (Tie).
春風に池の氷や解けぬらん待たれぬ浪の花を見る哉
haru kaze ni ike no kôri ya tokenuran matarenu nami no hana o miru kana |
In the breath of spring Will the ice upon the pond Melt? Unanticipated blossom touched Waves come into view… |
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Right (Tie).
鶯のなみだのつらゝ聲ながらたよりにさそへ春の山水
uguisu no namida no tsurara koe nagara tayori ni sasoe haru no yama mizu |
The bush warbler’s Tears of ice, And song, Issue an invitation! To the mountain waters this springtime… |
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The Right team have no comments to make about the Left’s poem this round, but the Left wonder whether the essence of the poem, of the warbler’s ‘tears of ice’ and song inviting the waters, might not be a bit much?
Shunzei remarks that the form and phrasing of the Left’s poem is ‘certainly charming’, and echoes their criticism of the Right’s poem, as having an ‘impossible essence’. He then goes on to say, ‘The Left is placidly charming; the Right’s essence must be excessive. They are equivalent and I judge this round a tie.’