shibashi wa setemo
|How many years
Has it been since I
Broke the brushwood to reach Fourth Rank?
I has been a while, and yet
I was happy then…
michi no shiishiba
koeyuku hito zo
|Rank is a mountain
Trail; the brushwood I broke to reach the Fourth
Some years ago, and
Those men who cross to greater heights,
How I do envy them!
Both teams say that their poems are ‘no more than an expression of personal dissatisfaction’.
Shunzei’s judgement: Both poems are, indeed, similar personal laments [jukkai]. The Right’s ‘trail; the brushwood’ (michi no shiishiba) sounds more modern. The Left’s poem, though, should win.