Left (Tie).
逢見ても身にやは年の積るべき我老いらくになしと答ふな
| aimite mo mi ni ya wa toshi no tsumorubeki wa ga oiraku ni nashi to kotauna |
Even should you meet me Upon you the years Would the years pile up? So to this old man I would not have you say no… |
Lord Ari’ie.
843
Right.
包めども老蘇の森の薄紅葉たへでも色に出でにける哉
| tsutsumedomo oiso no mori no usumomiji taedemo iro ni idenikeru kana |
Although they may be hidden in The sacred grove of Oiso, The pale scarlet leaves’ Hues may not endure, but Still have appeared… |
The Provisional Master of the Empress Household Office.
844
The Right state: the Left’s poem’s conception is vague. The Left state: the Right’s poem has no faults to indicate.
In judgement: the Left is unclear in style, but the configuration of ‘upon you the years’ (mi ni ya wa toshi no) is pleasant. Although one wonders why ‘pale scarlet leaves’ (usumomiji) is used, the following ‘hues may not endure’ (taedemo iro ni) is elegant. The round should tie.