Round Six

Left (T – Tie)

うかりける汀におふるうきぬ縄くることなくていくよ経ぬらん

ukarikeru migiwa ni ouru uki nunawa kuru koto nakute ikuyo henuran

Downcast, By the water’s edge a’growing, Drifting, a water-shield am I— Since he has ceased to come, How much time has passed?

Lady Shōshō
59

Right (M – Win)

夜とともに袖のみぬれて衣川こひこそわたれ逢瀬なければ

yo to tomo ni sode nomi nurete koromogawa koi koso watare ause nakereba

With the coming of night My sleeves are simply soaked— The River Robe Goes on does my love, Though meetings are there not…

Lady Shinano
60

Toshiyori states: neither Left nor Right appears to have any faults. They are, as expected,  somewhat trite, so I would say they are equivalent.

Mototoshi says: both of these poems seem pleasant. ‘Love going on without a meeting’ is particularly charming.