The Right state: we are unable to appreciate the Left’s poem. The Left state: as are we the Right’s poem.
In judgement: the Left’s poem would seem to be an improved example of a poem in the style of the previous round. That being said, the waves wouldn’t not come, would they? And, what is the point in addressing them so? The Right’s poem has an extremely flippant final section. The poems are comparable and should tie.
In judgement: although the Left’s poem sounds a little over-familiar, it certainly does have conception. The Right’s poem does sound smooth, but the origin poem has ‘Forget me not’ (wasuru na yo) – and this has ‘I will not forget’ (wasurezu yo) – the origin poem has ‘for distant as the clouds’ (hodo wa kumoi ni) – and this has ‘how far beyond the clouds’ (iku kumoi to wa); and ‘as the moon across the skies’ (sora yuku tsuki no) is identical, so the only part which as been changed is ‘I shall return – ‘til then’ (meguri au made). It is only to be expected that it would sound good, given that it presents much of the same material in the same order. The Left should win.
When Major Councillor Asamitsu was still of low rank, he secretly visited a woman’s dwelling, and when he said he would not return home with the dawn, she composed:
岩橋の夜の契も絶えぬべし明くるわびしき葛木の神
iwabashi no
yoru no chigiri mo
taenubeshi
akuru wabishiki
kazuragi no kami
That bridge of stone
Like our night’s vow
Cannot endure;
With the coming dawn, how sad
Is the god of Kazuragi…