Composed on rivers.
泊瀬川白木綿花に落ちたぎつ瀬をさやけみと見に来し我れを
| patusegapa sirayupupana ni otitagitu se no sayakemi to minikosi ware wo |
The River Hatsuse As white mulberry blossom Tumbles; The rapids feel so fresh to Me, come to gaze upon them… |
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Winter I: 24
Left.
宇津の山夕越え來れば霙降り袖ほしかねつ哀この旅
| utsu no yama yū koekureba mizore furi sode hoshikanetsu aware kono tabi |
Gloomy in the Utsu Mountains, Crossing them at dusk In a fall of sleet; I cannot dry my sleeves, On this lonely journey. |
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Right.
今日も又交野の御野に霙してかはく間もなき狩衣かな
| kyō mo mata katano no mino ni mizore shite kawaku ma mo naki karigoromo kana |
Today once more On the royal hunting grounds at Katano Sleet falls; No time at all to dry My hunter’s garb… |
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The Right find no faults with the Left’s poem. The Left merely say that the Right’s poem sounds old-fashioned [furumekashi].
Shunzei’s judgement: ‘The Left’s ‘I cannot dry my sleeves, on this lonely journey’ (sode hoshikanetsu aware kono tabi) has a strong sound of loneliness about it [sabite wa kikoehaberu], but there is a lack of anything connected to utsu no yama in this poem. In The Tales of Ise where it says ‘By Utsu Mount in reality‘ (utsu no yamabe no utsutsu ni mo), it does not seem that sleet was falling. If there is no reason for including utsu no yama to express the sense of sleet falling, there are many other places which could have been used to express a lonely journey. As there is no reason for including it, formally [sama de] there is a lack of connection to it. The Right’s katano no mino, too, as in the poem ‘To lend lodging to keep me dry, is there no one‘ is about hail, though hawking does take place there, so the poem does sounds slightly charming [sukoshi okashiku kikoyu]. Both Left and Right use utsu no yama and katano no mino, respectively, unnecessarily – anywhere would have done as well. Both poems are equal for this reason.’
Autumn III: 25
Left (Win).
長月の月も在明になりぬれば秋暮れ果つる夕暗の空
| nagatsuki no tsuki mo ariake ni narinureba aki kurehatsuru yūyami no sora |
When the Longest Month Comes close To daybreak, Autumn is in twilight In the darkened evening skies… |
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Right.
立ちかへる空なく秋や思ふらん野邊の草葉に露ぞ茂れる
| tachikaeru sora naku aki ya omouran nobe no kusaba ni tsuyu zo shigereru |
There will be no return To these skies, does the Autumn Feel? All the plants upon the plain are Drenched with dew… |
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The Right wonder, ‘Why the Left has “Autumn in twilight” (aki kurehatsuru) at daybreak?’ The Left respond, ‘This is simply to convey the feeling that autumn has reached its end with the evening darkness. In the Right’s poem, “no [return] to these skies” (sora naku) does not fit with the conception [kokoro yukite kikoezu]. We also wonder at the usage of “drenched with dew” (tsuyu shigeru).’
Shunzei’s judgement: The Left’s poem is better.