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Love III: 19

Left.
引かへて荒き氣色をみだらおのこまごまとこそ恨かけつれ

hikikaete
araki keshiki o
midarao no
komagoma to koso
uramikaketure
You have changed, and
Dishevelled in appearance
As a piebald
Colt, you are not, yet
I hate you still!

Kenshō
757

Right (Win).
露しげき秋の野も狭の眞葛原いつまでよその物と聞きけん

tsuyu shigeki
aki no no mo se no
makuzubara
itsu made yoso no
mono to kikiken
Dew drenched,
The autumn field is all
Covered with kuzu,
For how long will such distant
Whispers reach me?

Lord Takanobu
758

The Right state: the Left’s poem sounds pretentious. We are also unable to accept the use of ‘colt, you are not’ (komagoma). The Left state: the Right’s poem sounds archaic.

In judgement: ‘Dishevelled in appearance as a piebald’ (araki keshiki o midarao) is entirely unacceptable style. As for ‘covered with kuzu’, while ‘field is all’ (no mo se) is also undesirable, the final section is elegant. It should win over ‘piebald’.