Eien narabō uta’awase 01

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Poets

LeftRight
Lord Dainagon [Kōkaku]Lord Chūnagon [Kyōen]
Lord SaburōUshigimi
Retired from the world on Mount Uji [Eien]Senior Assistant Minister Past Lecturer [Kakuyo]
Cell of the Fragrant Elephant [Shin’ei]Cell of the Everlasting Truth [Tanshū]
Controller’s Graduate [Shinkei]Kerin’in Graduate [Yūzen]
Cell of Fragrant Cloud [Shōchō]Cell of Compassionate Light [Sōen]
Lady KazusaLady Shikibu

Judge

Mototoshi

Former Director of the Bureau of Carpentry, Toshiyori[i]

Cherry

Round One

Left

みやまにはしひがかざをれはやけれどふもとのはなはことしさくめり

miyama ni wa
shii ga kaza’ore
hayakeredo
fumoto no hana wa
kotoshi sakumeri
Deep within the mountains,
Brushwood is broken by the wind
So swiftly, yet
In the foothills the blossom
Will bloom this year, it seems.[ii]

Lord Dainagon
1

Right

ちるはなをさそふとみつるはる風のうはのそらにもすててけるかな

chiru hana o
sasou to mitsuru
harukaze no
uwa no sora ni mo
sutetekeru kana
The scattered blossoms
Look to be beckoned by
The spring breezes,
Even high up in the skies
To be abandoned!

Lord Chūnagon
2

I would say there’s no reason to say that the poem of the Left is superb, yet it does have a little bit of interest. The poem of the Right’s ‘Even high up in the skies /To be abandoned!’ completely fails to exceed vulgar diction. Thus, I make the Left the winner.

The poem of the Left’s ‘Brushwood is broken by the wind’ and so forth cannot be called ordinary and is an extremely charming use of diction. However, if the branches are broken and lost, then it would appear difficult for them to bloom, yet the addition of ‘yet’ to ‘swiftly’ gives the impression that there are branches remaining, thus following this with ‘Will bloom this year, it seems’ appears clumsy.

The poem of the Right has nothing remarkable about it, and no particular errors. Even so, because except in exceptional circumstances, the Left must win the first round, I make the Left the winner.


[i] This match was initially judged by Fujiwara no Mototoshi, but at some point after this, one of the participants, Sōen, submitted an ‘Appeal’ (chinjō) claiming these were unfair, and Toshiyori was asked to re-judge the match. The result is that there are two manuscript traditions for this event, one with Mototoshi’s judgements and one with Toshiyori’s. I am including both sets of judgements here.

[ii] The end of winter-beginning of the Twelfth Month. みやまにははやまのあらしあらげなりしひのかざをれいくそかかれり miyama ni wa / hayama no arashi / aragenari / shii no kaza’ore / ikuso kakareri ‘Deep within the mountains / Across the timber slopes the storm wind / Rages; / Brushwood is broken by the wind / O’er countless tens of trees.’ Sone no Yoshitada (Yoshitada-shū 342)

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