Love III: 11

Left.

年ぞ經る見る夜な夜なも重ならで我も無き名か夢かとぞ思

toshi zo furu
miru yonayona mo
kasanarade
ware mo nakina ka
yume ka to zo omou
The years go by
And meeting night after night
Is so rare, that
Even for me a baseless rumour, or
A dream, it seems…

Lord Sada’ie.

741

Right (Win).

心ざし有るか無きかの忘れ水いかなる折に思ひ出づらむ

kokorozashi
aru ka naki ka no
wasuremizu
ikanaru ori ni
omoi’izuramu
Your love for me:
Is it real, or is it not,
Like a forgotten stream;
When, for certain,
Do you remember me, I wonder…

Lord Tsune’ie.

742

The Gentlemen of the Right state: we wonder, somewhat, about the link in ‘Even for me a baseless rumour, or a dream, it seems’ (ware mo nakina ka yume ka to zo). The Gentlemen of the Left state: the Right’s poem is old-fashioned.

In judgement: the Left’s poem certainly has the fault of obscuring its subject – there can be no doubt of this. The conception of the Right’s ‘forgotten stream’ (wasuremizu) is not retained in contemporary poetry, I think. And yet, while it is old fashioned, I cannot recall such a usage. In the absence of this, it must seem novel. Thus, in the end, the Right should win.

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