Left (Tie).
年を經て遂に逢べき中ならば齢ばかりを歎かざらまし
| toshi o hete tsui ni aubeki naka naraba yowai bakari o nagekazaramashi |
If the years go by, and Finally, that we meet Should come to pass, Just our youth Should not be a source of grief! |
Lord Suetsune.
859
Right.
比べ來し振分髪のそのかみも終の思やなを遊びけん
| kurabekoshi furiwakegami no sono kami mo tsui no omoi ya nao asobiken |
We did match Our hair, bunched on either side: Back then, That, at last, our passions would Join – I wonder, did we know it? |
Nobusada.
860
The Right state: the conception of youth is lacking. The Left state: the initial part simply resembles the original poem.
In judgement: the Left’s poem, from beginning to end, uses nothing but commonplace diction. The Right’s poem, too, really says nothing beyond the sense of its origin poem. The poems are of the same quality.