Left (Win).
山吹の花のさかりになりぬとや折知りがほに蛙鳴くらん
yamabuki no hana no sakari ni narinu to ya ori shirigao ni kawazu nakuran |
Golden kerria Blooms their peak Have reached, so Seeming to know the season Do the frogs sing on. |
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Right.
谷水の岩もる音はうづもれてすだく河づの聲のみぞする
tanimizu no iwa moru oto wa uzumorete sudaku kawazu no koe nomi zo suru |
Waters in the valley Soak the rocks – the sound Swallowed by Swarming frogs’ Singular songs. |
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Both teams say that they consider the other’s poem to be ‘trite’ [kyūbutsu] this round.
Shunzei’s judgement: The Left’s poem certainly certainly has a conception [kokoro] which one is well-accustomed to hearing, but I am unable to recall exactly where. In form it is well-constructed [utazama yoroshikuhaberubeshi]. The Right’s initial “Waters in the valley soak the rocks – the sound swallowed” (tanimizu no iwa moru oto wa uzumorete) is excellent [yū], but the latter part is definitely old-fashioned [furite]. Thus, the Left must win.