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FGS XVI: 1738

From among his miscellaneous poems.

くれぬるかまがきの竹のむらすずめねぐらあらそふ声さわぐなり

kurenuru ka
magaki no take no
murasuzume
negura arasou
koe sawagunari
Is it dusk?
Along the bamboo of my lattice fence
A flock of sparrows
Quarrelling over roosts
Is chirping noisily, indeed!

The Jōmyōji Minister of the Left
浄妙寺左大臣

A kuzushiji version of the poem's text.
Created with Soan.

Sahyōe no suke sadafumi uta’awase 4

The Beginning of Summer

Left

ふるさとはこだかけれどもきみならぬほととぎすにもうとまれにけり

furusato wa
kodakakeredomo
kimi naranu
hototogisu ni mo
utomarenikeri
Around this ancient estate
The trees grow high, yet
Not by you alone,
By the cuckoo, too
Am I despised.

Tadamine
7

Right (Win)

やまがつのかきほにさけるうのはなはたがしろたへのころもかけしぞ

yamagatsu no
kakiho ni sakeru
u no hana wa
ta ga shirotae no
koromo kakeshi zo
Along the mountain man’s
Lattice fence bloom
Deutzia:
Whose white mulberry
Robes are hung there?

Mitsune
8

Autumn III: 15

Left.

今日といへばやがて籬の白菊ぞ尋し人の袖と見えける

kyō to ieba
yagate magaki no
shiragiku zo
tazuneshi hito no
sode to miekeru
On this day
At last, along my lattice fence
White chrysanthemums:
Seeming like the sleeves of
One who came to call…

Lord Kanemune.

449

Right.

さか月に浮べる今日の影よりやうつろひ初むる白菊の花

sakazuki ni
ukaberu kyō no
kage yori ya
uturoisomuru
shiragiku no hana
In my wine cup
Floating on this day:
Does the moonlight
Bring on changing hues
For white chrysanthemum blooms?

Ietaka.

450

The Right say that having the phrase ‘at last, along my lattice fence’ (yagate magaki no) continuing one from the other is ‘unsatisfactory’ [kokoroyukazu]. The Left say that the Right’s phrasing sounds as if the change in colour is brought about by the blossom floating in the wine cup, rather than the moonlight, and query if this is appropriate.

Shunzei’s judgement: Is the Left’s ‘at last, along my lattice fence’ that poor [ashiku ya wa]? Furthermore, the Right’s poem simply means ‘when floating in the wine cup’ the colours ‘change’. Neither poem has any conspicuous faults [tomo ni toganaku kikoyu]. The round should tie.