三島江の入江の真菰雨降ればいとど萎れて刈る人もなし
| misimae no irie no makomo ame Fureba itodo siworete karu Fito mo nasi |
Upon Mishima Bay’s Wild rice in the inlets, Rain does fall, and It is cast down all the more With no one to reap it… |
Minamoto no Tsunenobu
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Eikyū hyakushu 343
KKS XX: 1091
Eikyū hyakushu 303
Kyūan hyakushu 1311
Horikawa hyakushu 441
Love VI: 23
Left (Win).
さはらずは今宵ぞ君を頼むべき袖には雨の時わかねども
| sawarazu wa koyoi zo kimi o tanomubeki sode ni wa ame no toki wakanedomo | If you were unhindered On this night, then, my love, In you I could trust; But on my sleeves the rain Falls without surcease… |
Lord Sada’ie.
945
Right.
來ぬ人を待つ夜更け行秋の雨は袖にのみ降る心地こそすれ
| konu hito o matsu yo fukeyuku aki no ame wa sode ni nomi furu kokochi koso sure | When a man who fails to come Is awaited and the night grows late, The autumn rain Falls on my sleeves, alone – That is what I feel! |
Ietaka.
946
The Right state: the phrase ‘if you were unhindered’ (sawarazu wa) sounds poor. The Left state: the Right have simply composed a poem just like Lord Yorimasa’s君戀ふとながめあかせる夜の雨は袖にしも降る心地こそすれ kimi kou to / nagame akaseru / yoru no ame wa / sode ni shimo furu / kokochi koso sure ‘That you love me / I have heard enough / This night when the rain / Upon my sleeves especially does fall – / That is what I feel!’.
In judgement: the Left are said to have a poor-sounding phrase, and the Right to have referred to Yorimasa’s poem. That it is difficult to entirely avoid to referring poems outside of the anthologies is something which people still seem to be unable to remember, but the Gentlemen of the Left have recalled this well. The final section of the Right’s poem does bear an uncanny resemblance to Yorimasa’s poem. If there should be a prior example of a phrase’s use, then while it maybe poor-sounding, the Left should win.
Love VI: 22
Left.
独のみ寢屋の板間もあはずして雨も涙も所せきまで
| hitori nomi neya no itama mo awazushite ame mo namida mo tokoroseki made |
All alone, and The boards above my bedchamber Fail to come together; Until with raindrops and tears both I am excessively… |
Lord Ari’ie.
943
Right (Win).
深き夜の寢覺に何を思けむ窓打ちてすさむ暁の雨
| fukaki yo no nezame ni nani o omoikemu mado uchisusamu akatsuki no ame |
Late within the night, I start awake; what Was in my thoughts? Beating against my window is The dawntime rain. |
Jakuren.
944
The Right state: we cannot grasp the sense of the Left’s use of ‘until’ (made). The Left state: the Right’s poem is certainly not easy to understand on hearing.
In judgement: is not the use of ‘until’ (made) simply because it is appropriate to conclude a poem with that syllable? I can see nothing problematic with the use of ‘beating against my window’ (mado uchisusamu) in the Right’s poem. Thus, I make the Right the winner.
Love VI: 21
Left (Tie).
かきくらし降りくる雨も君ならば濡るとてさらに厭はざらまし
| kakikurashi furikuru ame mo kimi naraba nuru tote sara ni itowazaramashi |
All is darkened by The falling rain, but Were that to be you, my love, I would be drenched, but It would not be unwelcome! |
Lord Kanemune.
941
Right.
ひとり寢の床にしもなど音す覧しづかたにそゝく暁の雨
| hitorine no toko ni shimo nado otosuran shizukata ni sosoku akatsuki no ame |
Sleeping solo In my bed, so why Is there the sound Of quiet dripping Dawntime rain? |
Lord Takanobu.
942
The Right state: while the Left’s poem does have a desirable sentiment, its expression is outrageous. The Left state: why, indeed, should there be a sound in the poet’s bed?
In judgement: the Left’s desirable sentiment is perfectly commonplace in poetry. The Right, with ‘dawntime rain’ (akatsuki no ame), is elegant. The poems are comparable and tie.
Love VI: 20
Left.
雨そそき人待つ宵は憂かりけりこやことづけにならんと思へば
| ame sosoki hito matsu yoi wa ukarikeri koya kotozuke ni naran to omoeba |
Rain dripping, The nights awaiting him are Cruel, indeed; That is his excuse, Or so I feel! |
Lord Suetsune.
939
Right (Win).
頼めねど絶えず音する時雨かな戀しき人のかゝらましかば
| tanomenedo taezu otosuru shigure kana koishiki hito no kakaramashikaba |
I put no trust in you, yet Ceaselessly, you come to call O, showers! I would that the man I love Would do the same… |
Lord Tsune’ie.
940
The Right state: the Left’s poem has no faults. The Left state: the Right’s poem is pedestrian.
In judgement: in the Left’s poem, while ‘rain dripping’ (ame sosoki) sounds like it should recall Eastern House, there is no clear reason for this, and ‘that is his excuse’ (koya kotozuke) would also seem to refer to ‘“In the land of Tsu / Come on”’ (tsu no kuni no / koya). ‘Rain dripping’, though, does not link to this, I think. While the Right’s poem may be pedestrian, it certainly should win.