Round Two

Left (Win)

ふく風も身にしむ秋の夕ぐれに哀をそふる鹿のこゑかな

fuku kaze mo mi ni shimu aki no yūgure ni aware o souru shika no koe kana

The gusting wind Pierces my flesh on an autumn Evening, as Sadness laces The stag’s cry!

Lord Michyoshi
27

Right

妻こふるさ夜ふけがたの鹿のねに声うちそへて秋風ぞ吹く

tsuma kouru sayo fukegata no shika no ne ni koe uchisoete akikaze zo fuku

Yearning for his mate as Brief night wears on, A stag’s cry Is voiced, lacing The gusting autumn wind.

Tamechika
28

Both Left and Right have the same overall content, but the Left’s ‘yearning for his mate as / Brief night wears on’ reverses the appropriate order of the diction: it would be preferable to say ‘Brief night wears on as / Yearning for his mate’. The Left has no such issues and so it should win.