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Dairi uta’awase – Tentoku yo nen 01

Round One

Haze[i]

Left

くらはしのやまのかひより春がすみとしをつみてやたちわたるらん

kurahashi no
yama no kai yori
harugasumi
toshi o tsumite ya
tachiwataruran
From Kurahashi
Mountain’s passes
Does the haze of spring
Store up the new year as
It rises all around, I wonder?

Asatada
1[ii]

Right

ふるさとは春めきにけりみよし野のみかきのはらをかすみこめたり

furusato wa
harumekinikeri
miyoshino no
mikaki no hara o
kasumi kometari
Around the capital of old
Spring is all about.
In fair Yoshino
Mikaki plain is
All covered o’er with haze.

Kanemori
2[iii]

When both Left and Right had recited their poems, His Majesty spoke to this minor official, saying, ‘You should determine their merits and failings.’ I demurred, saying, ‘My understanding of the thirty-one syllables of waka is not such as to enable me to do this. I humbly request that Your Majesty decides.’ His Majesty, responded, ‘Should you not do this, it will spoil today’s events, and store up resentment. Make your determinations swiftly.’ In the face of His Majesty’s displeasure, I presented my own clumsy opinions.

In the Left’s poem, it is pleasant to describe Mount Kurahashi [Storehouse-bridge] as storing up the new year. In addition, it is certainly the case that crossing a bridge is what one does. The poem’s overall manner is also appropriate. As for the Right’s poem, the reference to being covered with haze seems a bit late, leaving one to wonder why the capital is springlike.

This round, my decision reflected His Majesty’s views. Observing the expressions of the imperial mien, I swiftly declared the Left the winner.


[i] Kasumi

[ii] This poem was included in the third edition of Kin’yōshū (I: 3), although not in either of the earlier two versions. It is also in Shinsen rōeishū (I: 69).

[iii] This poem is included in Shikashū (I: 3)

MYS XI: 2365

内日左須 宮道尓相之 人妻姤 玉緒之 念乱而 宿夜四曽多寸

うちひさす みやぢにあひし ひとづまゆゑに たまのをの おもひみだれて ぬるよしぞおほき

utipi sasu
miyadi ni apisi
pitoduma yuwe ni
tama no wo no
omopimidarete
nuru yosi zo opoki
Bright sun shines on
The avenues of the capital where I met
Another’s wife, who
My jewelled thread of life
Cast into tangled passion–
So many the nights we slept together!

[One of] five poems from an ancient collection.

Kinkai wakashū 646

Composed on Shintō in relation to ancient estates.

磯のかみふるきみやこは神さびてたたるにしあれや人もかよはぬ

iso no kami
furuki miyako wa
kami sabite
tatarunishi are ya
hito mo kayowanu
Here at Isonokami
The ancient capital was
Touched by the divine:
Was it cursed, perhaps, so
Folk no longer travel there?[i]

646


[i] See: Composed at the Isonokami temple in Nara on hearing the cuckoo sing. いその神ふるき宮この郭公聲ばかりこそむかしなりけれ isonokami / furuki miyako no / hototogisu / koe bakari koso / mukashi narikere ‘Here at Isonokami / In the ancient capital / The cuckoo’s / Call alone / Is as of old.’ Dharma Master Sosei (Kokinshū III: 144)

Kinkai wakashū 599

都べに夢にもゆかむ便あらばうつの山風ふきもつたへよ

miyakobe ni
yume ni mo yukamu
tayori araba
utsu no yamakaze
fuki mo tsuteyo
If towards the capital,
Even to her dreams would you go, and
Be my messenger,
O, Utsu Mountain breeze,
Blow, and tell her…[i]

599


[i] See: While at Utsu Mountain in Suruga, he thought of someone he had been meeting and sent this to the capital. するがなるうつの山邊のうつゝにも夢にも人にあはぬなりけり suruga naru / utsu no yamabe no / utsutsu ni mo / yume ni mo hito ni / awanu narikeri ‘In Suruga / At the Utsu mountains / In truth and / In my dreams she / Is nowhere to be seen…’ Ariwara no Narihira (Shinkokinshū X: 904)

SKKS X: 931

On the conception of seeing the moon while travelling, while at a place called the Barrier Gate Hall.

草枕ほどぞへにける都いでていくよかたびの月にねぬらむ

kusamakura
hodo zo henikeru
miyako idete
ikuyo ka tabi no
tsuki ni nenuramu
Grassy pillows
For a while have been my lot!
Since departing the capital
For some days on my travels
Will I sleep beneath the moon.

Ōe no Yoshitoki

Kinkai wakashū 569

あづまぢのさやの中山こえていなばいとど都やとほざかりなん

azumaji no
saya no nakayama
koete inaba
itodo miyako ya
tōzakarinan
Upon eastland roads lies
Saya-no-Nakayama:
When I pass across it
How much the capital
Seems further away…[i]

569


[i] See: 安都麻道乃 手児乃欲婢佐可 古要弖伊奈婆 安礼波古非牟奈 能知波安比奴登母 azumaji no/ tego no yobisaka / koete inaba / are wa koinamu na / nochi wa ainuru tomo ‘On eastland roads lies / Tego-no-Yobisaka: / When I pass across it, / How filled am I with yearning, / Even should we meet once more…’ (Man’yōshū XIV: 3477)

Eien narabō uta’awase 06

Round Six

Left (Win)

やへざくらふるきみやこににほへどもふりずもはなのめづらしきかな

yaezakura
furuki miyako ni
nioedomo
furizu mo hana no
mezurashiki kana
Eightfold cherry
Around the ancient capital
Does glow, yet
Unfallen and anew, the blossoms
Are remarkable!

Cell of Fragrant Cloud
11

Right

みやこいでてかりそめにこし山ざとの花に心のからめられぬる

miyako idete
karisome ni koshi
yamazato no
hana ni kokoro no
karamerarenuru
Departing the capital
On occasion I make my way
To a mountain retreat where
The blossoms my heart
Have entangled.

Cell of Compassionate Light
12

The Left’s poem is a clear example of the overlayed diction fault. As for the Right’s poem, saying ‘have entangled’ is extremely overblown diction. Whatever sort of poem it might be, this expression would be unacceptable, wouldn’t it! Was this, perhaps, composed with an imperfect understanding of the Kawara Minister’s poem? That goes ‘For the scented / Breeze has yet to blow…’[1] Perhaps this is a misreading of a character in the poem’s text?[i] The Left has the fault of overlayed diction, and the Right…[ii]

The Left’s poem is extremely charming. I do have to say that having both ‘ancient’ (furuki) and ‘unfallen’ (furizu) is a fault and yet, this should not be criticized excessively. The poem of the Right’s ‘On occasion I make my way’, too, does not seem as if the poet is visiting the blossom, and so is lacking in sentiment. The concluding ‘have entangled’ is a piece of overblown diction, although it is not the case that it does not appear in prior poetry,[2] but I still feel that it grates on the ear a bit.


[1] When he participated in an archery display, during the reign of the Jōgan emperor [Seiwa]. けふ桜しづくにわが身いざぬれむかごめにさそふ風のこぬまに kyō sakura / shizuku ni wa ga mi / iza nuremu / kagome ni sasou / kaze no konu ma ni ‘Today let cherry blossom / Droplets my body / Drench! / For the scented / Breeze has yet to blow…’ The Kawara Minister of the Left (GSS II: 56)

[2] 美知乃倍乃 宇万良能宇礼尓 波保麻米乃 可良麻流伎美乎 波可礼加由加牟 michi no e no / umara no ure ni / haomame no / karamaru kimi o / hagareka yukamu ‘At the roadside / The briar rose tips / By bean vines / Are entangled, but from you / My love, I must depart…’ Hasetsukabe no Tori (MYS XX: 4352)


[i] Mototoshi is suggesting that Sōen has misread kagome かこめ in Minamoto no Tōru’s famous earlier poem as karame からめ, which would have been possible if reading a handwritten text.

[ii] There is a lacuna in Mototoshi’s judgement here, but it is clear from what he has said that he disapproved of both poems this round and so it would have been a tie.