まてとしもたのめぬ人の葛の葉もあだなる風をうらみやはせぬ
| mate to shimo tanomenu hito no kuzu no ha mo ada naru kaze o urami ya wa senu | ‘Wait for me!’ such words From him I cannot expect: An arrowroot leaf The faithless wind Will despise, will it not? |
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Love VI: 15
Left.
心あひの風いづかたへ吹かぬらん我には散らす言の葉もなし
| kokoro ai no kaze izukata e fukanuran ware ni wa chirasu koto no ha mo nashi |
This pleasant Breeze: whither Does it blow? To me not one scattered Leaf or word has it delivered. |
Kenshō.
929
Right (Win).
色に出し言の葉もみなかれはてゝ涙を散らす風の音哉
| iro ni idashi koto no ha mo mina karehatete namida o chirasu kaze no oto kana |
The bright hues of passion In these leaves and your words Have all withered away; Tears scattering with The sound of the wind… |
Lord Takanobu.
930
The Right state: ‘Breeze: whither’ (kaze izukata e) seems lacking. The Left state: the Right’s poem has no faults to indicate.
In judgement: in the Left’s poem, I wonder whether ‘breeze: wither’ really is lacking. ‘This pleasant’ (kokoro no ai) would seem to be an expression deriving from ‘At the head of the road’. I seem to recall it coming after ‘In Kofu in Takefu / Will I be’, but that is not a suitable source. The Right’s poem, as the Gentlemen of the Left have said, appears to have no faults. It should win.
Love V: 11
Left (Win).
葉を若みまだふし馴れぬ呉竹のこはしほるべき露の上かは
| ha o wakami mada fushinarenu kuretake no ko wa shiorubeki tsuyu no ue ka wa |
Fresh leaved, and Not yet grown to knots in bed, A bamboo Maid: will she draw the Kindly dew upon her? |
Lord Sada’ie.
861
Right.
情なき風に従ふ姫百合は露けきことやならはざるらん
| nasakenaki kaze ni shitagau himeyuri wa tsuyukeki koto ya narawazaruran |
The heartless Wind brushes A young star lily: To being dew drenched Is she, perhaps, unaccustomed? |
Lord Tsune’ie.
862
The Right state: the Left’s poem has not faults to indicate. The Left state: the Right’s poem lacks the conception of Love.
In judgement: the Left uses ‘bamboo’ (kuretake) and the Right ‘star lily’ (himeyuri): although the Left’s ‘Maid: will she draw’ (ko wa shiorubeki) does not seem possible to accept on grounds of style, but the Right, in addition to also lacking much conception of Love, has ‘heartless wind’ (nasakenaki kaze) which sounds poor. Thus, the Left should win, I think.