tazu no iru nagara no hama no hamakaze ni yorozuyo kakete nami zo yosu naru
Cranes rest Upon the long beach at Nagara, where With the beach-breeze O’er ten thousand ages The waves roll in![i]
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[i] See: Topic unknown. おきつかぜ夜半にふくらし難波がたあか月かけて浪ぞよすなる oki tsu kaze / yowa ni fukurashi / naniwagata / akatsuki kakete / nami zo yosu naru ‘The wind from out the offing / Has blown throughout the night, it seems: / At Naniwa Inlet / With the break of dawn / The waves roll in!’ Supernumerary Middle Counsellor Sadayori (Shinkokinshū XVII: 1597); and: Composed on the bridge at Nagara. 春の日のながらのはまに舟とめていづれか橋と問へどこたへぬ haru no hi no / nagara no hama ni / fune tomete / izure ka hashi to / toedo kotaenu ‘In the springtime sun / At the beach of Nagara / I halted my boat; / ‘Where is the bridge?’ I / Asked, yet answer came there none.’ Dharma Master Egyō (Shinkokinshū XVII: 1595)
kimi ga yo wa nagai no ura no hamakaze ni tatsu shiranami no kazu mo shirarezu
My Lord’s reign: At Nagai Bay The beach breezes Rouse the whitecaps In number entirely unknown.
Controller’s Graduate 65
Right
きみがよをまつちのやまのこまつばらちよのけしきを見るぞうれしき
kimi ga yo o matsuchi no yama no komatsubara chiyo no keshiki o miru zo ureshiki
My Lord’s reign Awaiting upon Matsuchi Mountain The pine seedling groves The sight for a thousand ages Joyfully will see!
Kerin’in Graduate 66
It’s impossible to decide on a winner or loser between the Left and the Right here in terms of conception, diction and overall style. To put it in general terms, I must make this round a further tie.
Neither Left nor Right is remarkable, but nor do they have any faults to mention. I’d make this round a tie.
