ne no bisuru hito ni kasumi wa sakidachite komatsu ga hara o tanabikitekeri
On the Day of the Rat Before folk has the haze Arisen, and Across the pine seedling plains Drawn up.[i]
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[i] See: Topic unknown. あさみどりのべのかすみのたなびくにけふのこ松をまかせつるかな asamidori / nobe no kasumi no / tanabiku ni / kyō no komatsu o / makaseturu kana ‘Pale green / Across the plains the haze / Does draw, so / Today, the pine seedlings / I will leave to it!’ Minister of Public Affairs Tsunenobu (Goshūishū I: 30). Both poems are built around a play-on-words: one of the Day of the Rat activities was to pull (draw) up (hiku 引く) pine seedlings (as mentioned above). This is echoed in the verb used to describe the haze spreading across the plains, tanabiku 棚引く (‘spread out at length horizontally’).
himeshima no komatsu ga ure ni iru tazu wa chitose furedomo toshi oizukeri
Among Himeshima’s[i] Pine seedling shoots Rest cranes: A thousand year may pass, yet They’ll not age through the years.[ii]
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[i] Himeshima 姫島 (‘Princess Isle’) was a small island which is believed to have lain in the mouth of the Yodo River where it entered the inland sea south of modern Osaka. Due to changes in topography and the river’s course since ancient times, however, its exact location is now unknown.
[ii] See: [One of] two poems composed to express his grief and sorrow by Kawabe no Miyahito when he saw the coffin of a young girl in the pine groves of Himeshima in Wadō 4 [711]. 妹之名者 千代尓将流 姫嶋之 子松之末尓 蘿生万代尓 imo ga na wa / chiyo ni nagaremu / himeshima no / komatsu ga ure ni / kokemusu made ni ‘This maiden’s name / Will drift down a thousand ages / Until Himeshima’s / Pine seedling shoots are / Choked with hanging moss.’ (Man’yōshū II: 228)
[One of] two poems composed to express his grief and sorrow by Kawabe no Miyahito when he saw the coffin of a young girl in the pine groves of Himeshima in Wadō 4 [711].
妹之名者 千代尓将流 姫嶋之 子松之末尓 蘿生万代尓
いもがなは ちよにながれむ ひめしまの こまつがうれに こけむすまでに
imo ga na pa tiyo ni nagaremu pimesima no komatu ga ure ni kokemusu made ni
This maiden’s name Will drift down a thousand ages Until Himeshima’s Pine seedling shoots are Choked with hanging moss.
kimi ga yo wa nagai no ura no hamakaze ni tatsu shiranami no kazu mo shirarezu
My Lord’s reign: At Nagai Bay The beach breezes Rouse the whitecaps In number entirely unknown.
Controller’s Graduate 65
Right
きみがよをまつちのやまのこまつばらちよのけしきを見るぞうれしき
kimi ga yo o matsuchi no yama no komatsubara chiyo no keshiki o miru zo ureshiki
My Lord’s reign Awaiting upon Matsuchi Mountain The pine seedling groves The sight for a thousand ages Joyfully will see!
Kerin’in Graduate 66
It’s impossible to decide on a winner or loser between the Left and the Right here in terms of conception, diction and overall style. To put it in general terms, I must make this round a further tie.
Neither Left nor Right is remarkable, but nor do they have any faults to mention. I’d make this round a tie.
