As a stag poem.
妻こふる鹿ぞなくなる小倉山やまの夕霧たちにけむかも
| tsuma kouru shika zo nakunaru ogurayama yama no yūgiri tachinkemu kamo | Loving his mate A stag cries out upon Gloomy Ogura Mountain, where Around the peak the evening mists Have arisen, it seems! |
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Kinkai wakashū 209
Bush clover at the roadside.
みちのべのをのの夕霧たちかへりみてこそゆかめ秋はぎの花
| michi no be no ono no yūgiri tachikaeri mite koso yukame akihagi no hana | By the roadside Across the meadows evening mists Rise and fall endlessly; Thus would I go and see The autumn bush clover blooms.[1] |
[1] An allusive variation on: For a poetry competition held in the Tenryaku era. 春ふかみゐてのかは浪たちかへり見てこそゆかめ山吹の花 haru fukami / ide no kawanami / tachikaeri / mite koso yukame / yamabuki no hana ‘In the depths of spring / Waves on the river at Idé / Rise and fall endlessly; / Thus would I go and see / The kerria blooms…’ Minamoto no Shitagō (SIS I: 68).
MYS VII: 1140
Composed in Settsu.
志長鳥 居名野乎来者 有間山 夕霧立 宿者無而
しながとりゐなのをくればありまやまゆふぎりたちぬやどりはなくて
| sinagatori winano wo kureba arimayama yupugiri tatinu yadori pa nakute | A waterbird’s long cry At Ina plain where I have come, In the Arima Mountains The evening mists have risen, and No lodging is there for me… |
Anonymous
GSIS IV: 292
Composed for the Poetry Match held at the Residence of Imperial Princess Sukeko (5/6/Eishō 5 kōshin [26.6.1050]).
をぐら山たちどもみえぬゆふぎりにつままどはせるしかぞなくなる
| wogurayama tatidomo mienu yuFugiri ni tuma madoFaseru sika zo nakunaru | On gloomy Ogura Mountain Stands unseen Among the evening mists Having lost his mate A belling stag. |
Gō no jijū
江侍従
Autumn II: 8
Left (Win).
夕霧に千草の花はこもれども隱れぬ物は蟲の聲ごゑ
| yūgiri ni chigusa no hana wa komoredomo kakurenu mono wa mushi no koegoe | In the evening mists A multitude of blooms Are enveloped, yet Unhidden are The insects’ songs… |
375
Right.
野邊の色はみな薄墨に成にけりしばしと見ゆ夕霧の空
| nobe no iro wa mina usuzumi ni narinikeri shibashi to miyu yūgiri no sora | The fields’ hues Have all with a weak wash of ink Been overlayed; Only briefly yet visible Is the misty evening sky… |
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The Right state that, ‘The Left’s poem is supposed to be on the theme of “evening mists”, but it seems to be more focussed on “insects”. The Left counter with, ‘the use of “weak wash of ink” (usuzumi) is unsuited to the end of the poem. The theme of “autumn evenings” is dully depicted, is it not?’
Shunzei’s judgement: Although the Left’s poem does begin with ‘in the evening mists’ (yūgiri ni), it certainly is a poem on insects. In terms of diction, though, ‘all with a weak wash of ink’ (mina usuzumi) is not permissible. Thus, even though it is on insects, the Left wins.