Left (Tie)

まつかぜにふけゆく月のすみのえはなみのよるこそたちまさりけれ

matsukaze ni fukeyuku tsuki no suminoe wa nami o yoru koso tachimasarikere

The wind through the pines Blows late upon the moon At Suminoe, where The night’s breaking waves Rise strikingly!

Novice Jakunen[1]
49

Right

しもならで月もるよひやかたそぎのゆきあはぬひまもかみはうれしき

shimo narade tsuki moru yoi ya katasogi no yukiawanu hima mo kami wa ureshiki

That ‘tis not frost, but The moon, dripping at night Through the ridge poles Unmatched gaps, Does the Deity feel joy?

Suke, from the Residence of the Former Minister of the Right[2]
50

The Left poem’s ‘Blows late upon the moon / At Suminoe’ sounds pleasant, but there have been recent poems, such as ‘Brings waves–that / I would tell you!’[3] and ‘Simply with the waves / Did seem to draw near with the night’[4] and while the initial section of the poem here differs, basing a poem on this is not that unusual, I think. The tone of the Right’s poem is charming, but it does not seem likely that the Deity would feel joy simply at the moon coming through the gaps in His ridgepoles. The Deity’s power is limitless and wards eighty isles beyond Sumiyoshi—indeed, there is nowhere in Tsumori’s shore or Sumiyoshi beach, above the waves or in the shad of the pines that it does not reach. I have discussed ridgepoles earlier. Nevertheless, the configuration of the poem isn’t bad, so these should tie, I think.

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[1] Shami Jakunen 沙弥寂念

[2] Zen-udaijin no ie no Suke前右大臣家佐

[3] 人しれぬ思ひありそのはま風に浪のよるこそいはまほしけれ hito shirenu omoi ariso no hamakaze ni nami no yoru koso iwamahoshikere ‘Unknown to all / My passion burns—toward a rocky / Beach the breeze / Brings waves–that / I would tell you!’ Middle Captain Toshitada (Horikawa-in enjo awase 17/KYS (2) 468/500)

[4] Composed when he was asked by people in the capital what the moon had been like, when he had returned there, after going to Akashi to gaze upon it, at a time when it was particularly bright. 有明の月もあかしの浦風に波ばかりこそよるとみえしか ariake no tsuki mo akashi no urakaze ni nami bakari koso yoru to mieshika ‘The dawntime Moon’s brightness, with Akashi’s / Beach breezes / Simply with the waves / Did seem to draw near with the night…’ Taira no Tadamori (KYS (2) III: 216/KYS (3) III: 212)